Goodbye!

There comes a day when a love that’s frail

Will shatter at a touch,

No matter how long it’s been that way

And has hung together, just,

The storm that gathers at eye and lip

Bursts out of a clear blue sky,

In a day of rage that will turn the page

And will leave you asking why?

 

The clouds will gather, the lightning strike

And the swift torrential rain,

Will tear apart an uncertain heart

And will douse your love with pain,

It matters not if you back away

Or appease a fevered mind,

For words are said that in truth are bled

From a feeling most unkind.

 

You’re torn apart in a retrospect

Of the years you thought were fine,

But now discover that ancient lover

Was keeping tabs on time,

It seems that nothing was ever right

That you did in years before,

The cruel asides and the parting jibes

As they slam that final door.

 

It taints the best of your memories

It empties feelings inside,

It’s like a war with an empty core

Tossed in a sea of pride,

But even then when you can’t pretend

That the end is worth a sigh,

The saddest sound in that dismal round

Is that final word, ‘Goodbye!’

 

David Lewis Paget

Reviews

[Warren Daniel II]

Once again your work has left me asking for more, I have no idea how you remain so consistent with such beautiful work. The introduction "There comes a day when a love that’s frail
Will shatter at a touch" just reeled me in, excellent work.

Warren Daniel

[WILDERNESS]

This poem has such resonance with life that I dumbfounded at its truthfulness and clarity. It cpould not have been written more purposefully .................... its a master piece.

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David, haven't been here in a while. Life, you know how it goes as your writing highly indicates :) You a gifted, well seasoned artist. Your wisdom is resounding

[Aziz Luther]

A really touching poem. I love the flow of ideas you have. Time seem to be the governor of all. In time, it all ends. I loved the poem and connected with it well.

[Ana B.]

A very impressive piece, full of emotion. It's final and accepting. Trully wonderful.

[Seyi Ojenike]

Wonderful piece... Giving one a nostalgic feeling

[R Smith]

wow! David, far from your usual style of storytelling this is such a sad and melancholy poem of losing the one you love, it is in my opinion one of your best poems and an amazingly wonderful write, it has everything that goes to make up the perfect poem of love and loss, bravo :)

[EdmundLinton]

The perception in this poem is laser sharp, and your ability to weave its cut is masterful. Thank you for sharing this masterpiece. - Edmund

[Scott Metro]

Very nice...
Well composed ..!

Scott

[Marie]

The end of any marriage that began with hope and love is always sad. You may go on to a new and better life, but the old one is ot forgotten.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree my friend with the words and story in the poem.
"It taints the best of your memories
It empties feelings inside,
It’s like a war with an empty core
Lost in a sea of pride,"
The above lines were amazing. You described the pain of loss with honest words and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote