Goodbye!

There comes a day when a love that’s frail

Will shatter at a touch,

No matter how long it’s been that way

And has hung together, just,

The storm that gathers at eye and lip

Bursts out of a clear blue sky,

In a day of rage that will turn the page

And will leave you asking why?

 

The clouds will gather, the lightning strike

And the swift torrential rain,

Will tear apart an uncertain heart

And will douse your love with pain,

It matters not if you back away

Or appease a fevered mind,

For words are said that in truth are bled

From a feeling most unkind.

 

You’re torn apart in a retrospect

Of the years you thought were fine,

But now discover that ancient lover

Was keeping tabs on time,

It seems that nothing was ever right

That you did in years before,

The cruel asides and the parting jibes

As they slam that final door.

 

It taints the best of your memories

It empties feelings inside,

It’s like a war with an empty core

Tossed in a sea of pride,

But even then when you can’t pretend

That the end is worth a sigh,

The saddest sound in that dismal round

Is that final word, ‘Goodbye!’

 

David Lewis Paget

Reviews

[Warren Daniel II]

Once again your work has left me asking for more, I have no idea how you remain so consistent with such beautiful work. The introduction "There comes a day when a love that’s frail
Will shatter at a touch" just reeled me in, excellent work.

Warren Daniel

[TheLostMind]

This one is really powerful.. Crude emotions radiating perfectly..Fantastic write :)

[Parimal Pratyush]

Speechless! One of my favorite for sure.. Hats off, respect and love. :D

[David O Whalen (O Haol..]

This was a pleasant surprise David! I think your many narrative poems have lulled me into the expectation that that was your preferred genre, and I do not always read them because they're always very long and I know that they're going to be excellently crafted. (and I have a very short attention) I'm assuming you have a good body of work that is not all narrative. I have wondered at times if you wrote in a variety of styles and I think this excellent (and relatively short for you) poem proves that you're an even better poet than I thought and I always thought you to be excellent.
Refreshing change of pace for and a pleasant surprise.

[msharma]

An very consistent write up.An excellent piece.

Again... you have stirred that within me... Your word introduce feelings, thoughts and emotion... I am in awe of your ability..

[Corbin Driver]

Excellent piece of work!!! I want to see more works by this author!

[alf]

Hi David Lewis Paget. I am sooo a sucker for rhymed verse. This heavily emotive outpouring is beautifully crafted, with seemingly simplistic ease. Loved it, loved the plea for understanding and loved the flow of the telling, alf

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

A wonderful write! It has such a classical feel, so full of depth and emotion. Enjoyed!

[andrew mitchell]

David, a fantastic read which you always excel. you are in a league of your own!

[RubyOmma]

This is awesome. Great work.
It seems that nothing was ever right
That you did in years before,
The cruel asides and the parting jibes
As they slam that final door.
So good. I bow to you, sir.