False Promise, and Mind Control

I tried to do something different. A off and on rhyming scheme. I gotta think Black Sabbath /w Dio cause this was inspired by Heaven and Hell

 You whisper what you say to be the truth in my ears

 But you have yet to act as you preach

 Eye for an eye makes the world blind

 Mabye she's seen to many evlis such as yourselves

 

 Nothing but sin is what we are

 Yet a man rides into the sky into an eternal kingdom where only perfectcies remain

 Can't you be real with yourself, and open your eyes

 So you can see through you're own lies?

 

 Wealth is the root of all evil

 Than why does the perfect being promise you eternity with it

 Can't stand sin so why does he tolorate you

 The pile of sin.

 

 Harder for a rich man to go to this kingdom than a sheep to go through the eye of a needle

 Than why do all poloticians claim to this faith?

 Is it this easy to see

 Or is this all just me?

 

 If you love everyone than your love isn't special

 If you treat others how you want to be treated than why can't you treat them how they treat you?

 See it's all just mind control cause all man truly wants is immortality, and a purpose

 But as for me I want truth, knowledge, wisdom

 Not lies, false promises, and rules only meant to be broken!

Author's Note

I'm gonna see if I can do something like this later only put some pentometer with it too. Thanx for reading, and have a boss day!

Reviews

[Emunah June.]

"Harder for a rich man to go to this kingdom than a sheep to go through the eye of a needle".

That line stuck out to me. the second I read it. That, and "Not lies, false promises, and rules only meant to be broken!" They display such truths in such majestic ways. You quite the talented young man. :)

[David the writer]

Thanks. It's pretty much all about my philosphy

[David the writer]

*it's pretty much all my philosphy*

[RachelReaper]

dude, this is DA BOSS. I love the line, "Harder for a rich man to go to this kingdom than a sheep to go through the eye of a needle" Awesome Boss poem, David!

[David the writer]

Thanks. It's really funny to see you like it.