The howls roar near

The howls roar near

Quick ready your silver before they're here

The clouds rush above the scene, and the moon quitley watches

The birds rush from the branches

 

The wind blows giving an uneasy chill

Because the fangs run nearly here, and they just want to feal the bloody thrill

Run! Run! You can hear all through the town during the cold frightful night

Lock the doors, and hold your silver because you're already dead after on bite

 

Oh no, your door flies acroos the room, and they rush

They pounce on you, and you feel your bones crush

Their sharp teeth rip through your neck

They leave you looking worst than a wreck

 

                             

Reviews

[S]

Hi, I like it :)
If you don't mind a small suggestion -
except for 'the' in 'the moon quietly watches',
if you remove every 'the' it reads stronger.

[David the writer]

Thanks

[RachelReaper]

sweet!!!! WEREWOLF ATTACK!!!!!!!!!!! *howls* ahahaha.... I enjoyed this poem, I got the thrill out of hearing about trying to fight against the wolves, but the only thing i would change is where you said, "dead after on bite" I think the on needs to be one, but other than that, great work!

[David the writer]

Thanks, I wrote this piece lat at night so a few grammer errors will occour

[deepblue04]

wow! Love it!!! Goood job!

[David the writer]

Thanks a lot!

[deepblue04]

no prob

[Anubis]

Nice!
I like the rhymes and the general feel of this, nice and dark :)

[Joe Morris]

A very nice gothic horror tale, you have rekindled my interest in the supernatural with this piece. Nice poetry

[David the writer]

Gothic? Meh, well thanx for the complimant

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Wow, this is really amazing and dark.
Great work!
100/100

[Irvette Dauphine]

wow.. i can feel the situation. i though i must run and then i caught up by them..
what i can say is this is amazing!!
like this poem :)

[David the writer]

Thanx, guess that's why I call myself a horror poet though my horror poetry used to be a lot longer

[afra]

simply beautiful ....i love it ...well done

[David the writer]

Thanx a lot Afra!