Bloody fangs

I stopped making poems to write a series, so this is a short poem so I can get back used to writing poems.

Can't you smell the blood

I can't wait to feel it flood

My fangs ever so dry

As the clouds pass through the dark sky,

Sneaking through the night, and into a small village

I'm thirstier just thinking about pillage

Their blood, their life

With my fangs as sharps as a knife,

I sneak through a window staying in the shadow

That has a clear path I follow

They laid in the bed not knowing that their Doom is about to strike

I laugh with the moon as I get more and more psych

I loom over them with my sharp fangs hanging out of my lips

I bite into his neck silently, and their satisfying blood now drips

I leave the small home now wrecked

I look over to see the victim bloody necked.  

Author's Note

I know this was short, but was it sweet?

Reviews

[DaturaBlossoms]

Good work overall, needs some minor editing and I'm not sure about the colored bits of text, but it was a fun read overall.

[David the writer]

Thanx, y'know if you enjoyed this than you might enjoy my newest poem "The Beast Within". Again, thanx!

[Esabella]

Totally rad, David! Loved the darkness factor of it. Awesome.

[David the writer]

Thanx, my poetry has that edge to it, that factor of darkness. Tis a reacourring event

[Esabella]

Well its cool, I like it.

[David the writer]

Thanx!

[~SouthernGirl~]

Huh, wow. It's dark and unique. I like it. Great write. :)

[David the writer]

Thanx! Usualy how it is

[~SouthernGirl~]

Your welcome. :)

[Caradoc]

Greetings from the host of the contest "Of Blood and Eternity".

I see you like to tell stories, at least with this poem. Those poor villagers, the hapless victims of a beast in the night. But then, isn't that the heart of vampire lore? They come, they despoil, and then they are gone, leaving only ruin in their wake.

A very nice write.

Thank you for entering my contest.

-Caradoc

[David the writer]

Thanks for hosting, and reviewing.

[XxPLWxREAPERxX]

FRACKIN' AWESOME

[David the writer]

lol wish I could still write horror poems =( this is how it began.. now it's all about love

[RachelReaper]

Vampires are so sweet, aren't they? You gotta love em ;)

[David the writer]

Glad you like my come-back to the horror poetry genre, and there are more comming soon

[Jon Settle]

Dark, evil, gloomy, descriptive, captivating, suspenseful..... I love this poem!!

[David the writer]

Thanx!

[dark light]

bloody, dark and gloomy
I love this poem

[ewest1220]

Evil...check, blood...check, gore.....check! Great job this was really well written my friend!

[David the writer]

Thanx!

[Destiny Doré]

I loved the descriptive nature of the poem, it made the poem easy to see in my mind and feel in my soul.

[David the writer]

It's nice to see people feel my work in their "soul". Thanx ^_^