The Court part 3

Iris volunteered to show me around. Located left of the room I was in, was the kitchen~ scraped down to a vacant room and then filled with supplies. Located right were the the majestic white marble stairs, leading upwards to the second floor and located opposite of the room of trophies was a long hallway.   After a long walk along the empty hallway, we reached the white living room, filled to the brim with redundant furniture and antiques. The boring walk was accompanied by some explanations.

"So, you're an elite?" Asked Iris, looking at me ,but still not stopping her fast legs.

"..." I didn't know what to answer. But then again, I did stupidly told them my real name. So, why not my social class? It is not like they will kill me right? So, I asked her back.

"So, you're an Outcaster?"

"Stop changing the subject. I know that it is weird telling a stranger that you just met about your personal life, but you're one of us now." Said Iris. Her skin turned red and her welcoming smile slowly turned to a frown. "We won't kill you."

"I know you won't." I replied. "But I am not sure about that guy."

"He bruises but he doesn't kill."

"So is that any better?" I said, stopping her from walking on.

"He is jealous." Said Iris, picking up a small knife from her pocket and handling it to me

"I can tell." My hand stretched out, receiving it from her. "What is this for?"

"You are going out hunting tonight." Said Iris.

"What? Why me?" I said.

"He wants to meet you alone in the wild, to train." Said Iris.

"Noah?"

"yeah."

Then I am as good as dead. I just hope Cat didn't say anything bad about me. Iris wished me luck, and walked away, but I stopped her before she could.

"Is he going to kill me?"

"No, I reckon he wouldn't." Iris answered with ease. "He told me he's gonna teach you a lesson."

I gulped and released her shoulder from my hand. "A hunting lesson." She added and walked off into the next room.

Author's Note

Thank you for spending your quality time to read this part. I really wish you enjoyed it and please be honest and leave a review down below. Thank you very much!!!! :)

Reviews

[Xavier Lee]

David, David, David...You've gotten better at pacing and description. I dare say much better. However, I can't help but feel that you're rushing too much. As I said in my review of the last chapter, don't be afraid to make it long. You've done better with the description of the area, but you could have spent some more time on it. "On my right were a set of majestic white stairs carved from marble." Following that, I can't get the imagery in my head, is the trophy room on the second floor, or is it facing the staircase? What's the floor plan of this place? How big is it? I seem to recall this being a museum, or am I wrong? If I'm right, why does a museum have a trophy room? If I'm wrong, is this some kind of mansion, or just a big house? Where are they? "We walked for a long while down the vast hallway, before entering a living room full of old antiques and redundant furnishings, startlingly white."
Also, he only changed the subject once, I'd replace 'stop' with 'don't'. Also, why is he one of them? When did that happen? I don't recall him announcing anything of that sort, and they sure didn't tell him. Not counting his time spent unconscious, he's been there for twenty minutes, tops and now they want to train him? After basically no time at all they seem very sure about each other. I trust exposition will come, but I'm sorry to say that based on what I've read thus far, it won't be well done.
Don't quote me on that last part because I suddenly became exhausted while writing it and therefore my word use was rather lacking. I'm sure it won't be poorly done, but it could have been done already.
As I did with my review of the previous chapter, I would like to express my admiration for the work as it is. Because despite the aforementioned faults I did enjoy reading as always. Continue the good work and I hope you haven't read this as being too harsh. I ask only that you consider what I've said because I'm no professional. All I've said is what I thought may have helped an already good piece become a little better. Thank you for reading this review and I hope that in return you will review my writing.

[David Ung]

Thank you for reviewing. I didn't see this review as too harsh. I appreciate every single criticism and I will take all that as considerations to make this part better. I am sorry that you didn't enjoy it as much as I thought you would and I would try to change that next time. I will read your writings right now. :)

[Xavier Lee]

Don't think that I didn't enjoy your writing because I stress again, it is a good read every time. Thank you for not taking my review as too harsh and seeing it as constructive criticism. I hope you'll take into consideration what I've said and make your next piece as perfect as I know you can make it.