Sipping Some Soup

I wonder why stars twinkle

Possibly it’s my sight

Because I blink so often

That half of day is night

 

My eyelids flicking up and down

Is really quite a problem

Cause when I try and sip my soup

My spoon is always wobblin

 

Some goes in my eye

And some gets up my nose

No matter how I try

That’s how the story goes

 

Tho, when I write a poor poem

It’s much less of a crime

Cause when it’s an awful write

I’m only doing it half the time

 

Reviews

[Anita Frader]

This is sweet, charming, fun and quite clever. 💛🙂

[Dave Brown]

Thank you for your kind words Ms. Frader
Here is hoping you have a fine day

[Anita Frader]

And you as well! 🙂💛

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"half of day is night"---due to blinking...clever.
No way this is an awful write...Makes me wonder what kind of soup it is.

[Dave Brown]

thankyou Jacob
I'm just grateful that this doesn't refer to thinking.
thank for the visit
hope all goes well

[John the Baptist]

Nicely rhymed, Dave. Is that a nervous tic, or are you just trying to stay awake?

[Dave Brown]

have you been talking to my wife?

[Stu. T.H.]

Doodles and scribbles are good practices for mind to stay sophiscated and healthy. It's a form of release, whether by conscious or unconscious need, to relieve the burdens of the taxing daily activies in our life. I suppose that goes the same for seeing stars in broad daylight. Some say it's lunacy or anxiety that causes such phenomenon in the glands but I believe it's just the excellency of one's eyes extending beyond the reign of the sun and rims of our material desires. Great poem, author Dave Brown. You captured the essence of momentarily living quite well.
- Leon.

[Dave Brown]

many thanks Leon
Good to have you leave an in depth comment

[Poetic Beauty]

Eating soup with a wobbly spoon is quite the challenge

[Dave Brown]

Especially if there is even a liddle hole in the middle!
Thanks for the visit

[Poetic Beauty]

Oh now that from bad to worst quickly 🤣

[Vol]

Dave,
It is wit such as this that may save poetry as a genre...
Vol

[Dave Brown]

Have to admit, it's lotsa fun
Take care down there