Gone Electric

My old tin lizzie was a constant battle

Constantly cursed with every rickety rattle

With endless noise ricochetin each way

I couldn’t hear a word my wife would say

 

So, we decided to purchase an electric car

For an accessory, it came with a snack bar

And when you’re driving, its super quiet

Being the clincher, which had us buy it

 

The drive of this beauty is somekina stable

For conversing together, we’re more than able

While enjoying mega quality ooze from its pores

She grasped the occasion to list my chores

 

She eventually got from top to bottom

I was amazed at how many I’d forgotten

The longer that this quiet machine was used

I realized it was the wrong decision I’d choosed

 

We’ve gone back to our old noisy Tin Lizzy

Her list of chores had left me lost and dizzy

From that all electric, I’ve quite happily fled

Again, no longer hearing a word she’s said

 

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

I'm certainly glad you realized your mistake and choosed right.

[Dave Brown]

Chooseding take a certain talent

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I knew there was something suspicious about these damn electric cars.

See you at the gas pump.
j.

[Dave Brown]

unfortunately, but I do enjoy my old clunkers that I assume will be eventually doomed to oblivion.

[Stella Armour]

i have a hybrid car, and it doesn't really have much character to define it .
Quiet, super-efficient and inexpensive yes, but such a lightweight compared to an ageing, cantankerous old friend :)

[Dave Brown]

I could write a book on my feelings re; automobiles, the hybrid being among them.
I see Toyota is bringing out a new line and based on the usual quality of their product, it could make quit a a positive impact
In the meanwhile, happy motoring

[Stella Armour]

I live in England and my car is an imorted Renault I must say it is the easiest car i have ever had to drive ..

[Chris Shaw]

Now that final line I recognize:) Bloomin selective hearing, and my other half has got an Olympic gold medal in that sport:) I knew he wouldn’t be the only one either:)

A fun read. Most enjoyable.

Chris

[Dave Brown]

Ah....Those husbands
there must be some reason for them or they would be long gone by now

[Stu. T.H.]

A fine read indeed, author Dave Brown. I must say, I commence the simplicity of enjoyment you silently praise through your works, the beauty of simplicity or simply just expressing appreciation to the ordinary life. I admire that greatly for I've endorsed in the works of such nature since I was but a learning toddler, regardless whether if they are products of Western or Eastern media. Simplicity, at times, are truly best. Thank you for sharing your work again today, and I wish you a nice day or night.

[Dave Brown]

Is it to Dan Rastley that I talk with on this late afternoon, explaining to him that simple minds create simple rhymes.
Having had zero instruction in the construction of poetics, I am basically inclined toward simple, straight foreword rhyming with an attempt to add some amount of humor, then cross my fingers and hope that whatever is created will be at least readable.
Let me thankyou again for another, much appreciated visit and comment.

[Stu. T.H.]

Following Eastern Desires, I must tell you personally as "T", that even farmers or beggars can be true poets. That is the secret to Eastern poetry that not many had realized. The beauty in simplicity even to the miniscule scope of madness, are always worth admiring.
I once came back from a trip to a university to attend a speech, on my way back, I cycled with a bike while casually stopping every minute to take a picture, sometimes of unmodern scenes, other times of grass piles. Others viewed me strangely but I paid no mind. And they, my friend, those patchs of grass have stories most worth hearing, because they are most exotic and beautiful. Because in simplicity, there is beauty beyond one's complexion of a mind. I wish you not to discredit yourself.

[Vol]

Dave,
Well told, sir, well told!
The astroturf is always greener on the other side of the asphalt...
Vol

[Dave Brown]

an interesting update on the old saying
apparently, 'they' are finding astro turf to be a serious polluter and in our area, are ripping it all up to be replaced with good old natural turf.
No need for thanks, I knew you were waiting to hear about that!
Enjoy what's left of your day

[Gee]

Selective deafness order of the day when it comes to some marital "discussions"
Enjoyed the read Dave.
Hope you are well

[Dave Brown]

selective indeed with special care taken around meal time
All good here and wish you a good holiday season