Cold Nights

The cold of nights persist

And my heart can’t warm

She stole all the good parts

The remainder is torn

 

Just moonlight on our pillow

Where she had once laid her face

Now that night light reveals

Nothing but an empty space

 

Once we drifted among clouds

And danced through stars

But my fall from her heaven

Left just open scars

 

What use is a body

With no heart to hold

Once filled with priceless passion

Now left with only fool’s gold

 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the slant rhyme in the first stanza...Emily D. would smile at you for that.
A body without the heart? No thank you.
great poem..
j.

[living lavender]

"But my fall from her heaven"
the power one has over another. portrayed so soundly.
chilling.
{yes. pun intended.}

[Dave Brown]

yes, that heart can traverse quite a telling route
thankyou for the visit and for making the effort to leave a comment

[Patricia Wedel]

Now left with Fools Gold… Being thankful for the Glitter of your ❤️ Love…. softly, Pat

[Dave Brown]

how wise you are Pat
The soft glitter of love is truly unbeatable

[John the Baptist]

Good rhyme and meter, Dave. This one would make a great country music song.

[Dave Brown]

Watched Elvis the other night
wonder if he'd be interested
Money, money, money, it's a rich man's world!!!!

[Stu. T.H.]

Even during nights - stone cold, I yearn for fireworks to fill in the blanks left by empty bypasses of those who visit my bed. That image is aroused from within me upon reading the poem. Quite a personal and profound work, author Dave Brown, and hopefully occurrences as such remain fiction, for all of us.

[Dave Brown]

fiction it is and will hopefully remain so

[Pete]

we've been having some cold nights, even colder when there's no one to share/warm our beds with. so true - the real warmth being within the heart. a frosty but skillful write ... :)

[Dave Brown]

a warm heart can heat the coldest night, so they say
& a ...:) 2U2

[Chris Shaw]

Such a sad poem. Perhaps a memory of a past love or a piece of fiction. A real emptiness here. Nicely penned Dave. Hope you are well.

Chris

[Dave Brown]

thanks Chris
We don't seem to be back and forthing quite as often as in the past so I will let you know all goes well these days and with Christmas coming the pace of activity has increased with present buying/ wrapping, goody cooking w/sneak eating and last minute doings keeping us all busily involved
And of course hope all goes well with you and yours.
have a jolly afternoon/evening

[Chris Shaw]

Same here. Busy with preparations. Tree sorted today. More presents to get and cards to write out. I have not been spending much time here lately Dave, though wish you and yours a very happy pre Christmas. Hope to be around more soon.