Young and Almost Free

You're soft like velvet

Taste like cherries against my tongue

The look in your eyes

I can see the desire to be held against the wind

Softly we sway 

Against the time we've been allowed

And on we go down the road

Singing songs we don't know the words to 

Young and almost free

I've got you and girl you've got me

No lights, no buzz, no fun

Trying to forget my favorite memories 

Won't you hold me down

Tell me you love me with your hand around my neck

Can't you bound me to you with rope

Just so I'll never think about running away from you 

You're soft like velvet

Taste like cherries against my tongue

The look in your eyes

I can see the desire to be held against the wind

Reviews

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Romance and journey of self discovery all at once

[Davidgeo]

For being such a critical reviewer it doesn't seem like you are backing it up with your own work.

In it of itself that is not a bad thing, but your critique's were mostly based on vitriol and ad hominin attack. If you are going to come from that angle you must be far beyond reproach in terms of your own work... that seems not to be the case here.

Just another generic adolescent erotic poem bonded to a rigid form. I'm actually kinda disappointed. It's no fun when I can't respect my enemies... it's even worse for me when I start to pity them.