A Long Lost Dreamer

The sidewalk hugged me as I took a walk down the city aisle 

I smoked and let my thoughts take turns holding me awhile

Dancing with the devil in my head, I never noticed the angels 

All these feelings in my empty heart accompany me amongst fools

I fell in love with a fallen angel named dualism

And she taught me all the wonders of self destruction and nihilism

My heart will be the end of me I swear, because I only think when I'm hurt

But I'm only hurt after my emotions do the talking my mind will exert

Still I'm a broken hearted mess of a long lost dreamer 

I want to make myself into some sort of believer

But there's nothing left to believe in but the drugs

And I'm no gangster, I never fit in with my neighborhood thugs

It all comes crashing against the shores of my retreat 

There's nothing left but my wounds for me to treat

I've fixed everything I could to put off working on my character

Because if there's anything I was ever scared of, it was getting better 

Nightmares in my bones make my depression ache all over

And this self imposed skepticism of myself is colder than December

Who knows where I'll hang my head next, but I can imagine

That one day I'll be a knight in shining armor fighting an evil dragon 

Of course the only thing I've ever fought is responsibility

The only armor I could wear is this leather jacket around me

And I've already saved the princess in my life, but I'm no hero

I'm just an empty soul that knows he couldn't stand being without her, so

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

You have good discipline, you write well.

But you are boring. No offense. I still liked what I read but, none the less, you lack impact.

I wouldn't change a thing. I kinda like well written boring.

[willmjspencer]

So, this is why you are ripping on this guy? Cause he called one of your poems boring? So what? The poem is boring. Rhyme schemes are boring to some people. Just means that we aren't your audience. Keep writing whatever you want to write; that's all that matters. I pretty sure all of my s**t is garbage, but who cares?

[Davidgeo]

I wouldn't bother yourself with such things.

[David-Tyler]

I never set out to rip anybody apart haha. I'm actually a pretty chill person. I don't post my finer writing here on Writerscafe. I post the writing I feel is weaker so I can get critiqued if anybody's kind enough. That's what I set out to do this morning; I just wanted to help. But it turned into beef. That's cool though. Take me or leave me.

[Davidgeo]

That's not believable. You need to be a better liar if you really wanna be a top notch sociopath. Or are you just one of those "confused" kids totally consumed with surface identity? You should post your "better" writings... we'd all love to see how impressive you are. I mean... you wouldn't wanna seem like a liar now, would you?

[David-Tyler]

I don't have to impress you. I don't post my best my work here because it gets stolen. I've watched it happen to a lot of my friends. I'm sick of you assuming s**t like you know me. I'm an eight teen year old drop out. So I'm young, okay. I'm not liberal at all. There's nothing wrong about being transgender, or whatever you want to be. I'm by no means a feminist, I don't do identity politics, I'm registered to vote, and will vote for Trump's reelection. If I am a sociopath, at least I'm good at it.

[Davidgeo]

For a kid who doesn't have to impress anyone you sure do go on and on about yourself. You should probably relax, go smoke some grass... this is not healthy for you right now. That is very obvious.