Be Happy or You Die

Be Happy or You Die
Learning pain,
forcing peace,
bloodied rain,
raging beast.
Joy screaming,
love burning,
fear dreaming,
die yearning.
Lost in the abyss,
forcibly forlorn,
flesh eating kiss,
listen or you burn.
Forget to cry,
plastic smile,
be happy or you die.

Reviews

[Kimberly Tickle ~~~ Dia..]

I like this, it is very unqie and impressive...You did wonderful work and it has a great flow to it....I look forward to reading your other writings.....

~~~~Kimberly Tickle~~~~Diamonds Of Life~~~~~~

[OchieWawa]

Wow, you have amazing flow to your writing, it's so easy to read. Now, I admit I am totally not a great critic on poetry, but I think yours is pretty amazing. Your words are strong and you express a lot in just one poem. Keep up the good work. ;3

[Natasha]

Oh wow... yeah... this rocks!

[Fantasyfairy]

Sorry t took so long hun, been having major poblems trying to leave reviews last couple of days, glad to see it's sorted now. I really liked this poem. The metaphors you used are very creative, and help the whole thing to become more real. I like the concept of it too, be happy or die. WHat else is there in life? Nice job hun, and thanx for sharing. XX

[Gary H]

Thought the way this was put together was impressive - using randomness and yet flowing together. One piece of advice that would make the impact of the end better - break up 'be happy or you die'. I would use 'be happy' as one line then leave a space before adding the 'or you die'. This gives the piece more of a dramatic edge.
Nicely written.

[Natalie C]

Wow yes, be happy or die. You have no idea how powerful this piece comes across. Beaultifully written and flows perfectly to a very true ending.

Amazing, thank you for sharing!

[H. A. M.]

Man. This felt like take it and like it or else! Some strong thoughts you got there.

[Thea M. Joy]

I I think this flowed very well and I too think this is a powerful piece. Great job!

[Ashentara]

oh how powerful, wow
I love the form
a few words every line..
it makes it even more powerful
love the imagery... love everything about it; definitaly going into my faves
great work, thanks for sharing

[Emily B]

Hard hitting. . . like a punch out of the blue. Or a wake up call.