Crimson Tears of the Fallen Angel

I luff it, and both are females, for the record

Crimson Tears of the Fallen Angel
Please, please forgive me,
I have to leave you now.
The Heavens are calling me,
the lord of demons wants me to bow.
I spread my silver wings,
with tears of ice upon my face.
I ignore the pain this brings,
I do not want to leave this place.
I must fly away,
so far away from here.
Though all I want is to stay,
to stay and hold you near.
I feel my heart fall,
as I hear the demons' call.
And I don't care if I never go back,
this Angel's had enough.
Down my cheek icy tears track,
as I long for your mortal touch.
I fly towards my guiding star,
my Angel's heart so full of fear.
I want to be where you are,
as I let loose another tear.
It's then I realize,
I won't be allowed back above.
I hear their collective sighs,
as I give my immortality for love,
and my tears turn to crimson rain,
as I unleash a whole new pain.
As I cry it begins to pour,
bloody rain falling from the skies.
My aching wings beat no more,
as this Fallen Angel cries.
Demon fires pierce my wings,
leaving them tattered and torn.
Despite all of these things,
despite being bloody and worn,
my heart will not be forlorn,
as the demons laugh and they scorn.

Please, please forgive me,
I cannot stay here anymore.
Every time I look at you I see,
what I gave up forever more.
My love for you is too great,
to them I did not wish to return.
For me it is too late,
as they sadly watch my feathers burn.
Every time I look into your eyes,
another part of me dies.
All I see is what I lost,
but now I realize,
you will always be worth the cost.
I was simply blinded by my cries.
I fell from the sky and hit the ground,
crumpled wings trailing in a crimson puddle,
bloody raindrops all around,
as I try so hard in warmth to huddle.
Legs bent back and my cloths are gone,
shoulders slumped, hair shielding my face.
The sky is stained by a crimson dawn,
red as the tears of an Angel fallen from grace.
I kneel in the bloody rain,
body laced by this fiery pain,
my love slowly driving me insane.

Please, please forgive me,
I'm lost and broken on the ground.
Blinded by tears I can't see,
Fallen Angel lost on Earth I'm found.
Bloody teardrops spill from my eyes,
because a true Angel never ever cries,
and that was my demise.
Find me shattered in the dirt,
wash away the pain and the hurt.
Then I'll stay by your side,
behind the tears and the fears I'll hide.
You'll heal my immortal heart,
as I finally allow myself to break.
As I slowly fall apart,
the pain is far too much to take.
I'll cry bloody tears in your embrace,
icy streaks falling down my face.
The demons laugh before they drown,
in the one thing that can kill,
in the,
Crimson Tears of the Fallen Angel,
the demons will die,
as I sit here and try,
to stop the tears,
and erase all my fears.

Please, please forgive me,
as the darkest poison pours down my face,
now that I've fallen from grace.
You will always be enough,
no matter just how rough,
I know things will get.
I stop crying these,
Crimson Tears of the Fallen Angel,
fallen no more,
as I rise from the floor.
And all the demons will die,
for it is the greatest sin,
to make an Angel cry,
to cause them pain within.

You, you forgave me,
now I rejoin my love,
thanking my friends above.
And now my face is dry,
for I refuse to cry.
And I love each Heavenly friend,
for now I get my happy end.

Reviews

[Ashentara]

Very beautiful
you sure know how to write about love
"now that I've fallen from grace.
You will always be enough,
no matter just how rough,
I know things will get" those lines are just gorgeous

I'm saving it, it's really great, I love the imagery, I love eveything about it
I noticed a few spelling mistakes though :)

[Kimmee Jean]

wow...music with this would be AMAZING!!!

Risa Jean

[Natasha]

that was beautiful *tears in eyes* i wish i could write like that, you should add music to it. you rock.

[Flamewind]

Wow... first, let me congradulate you on writing such a long poem. (I know I couldn't. Heh.) I love the imagery and you don't repeat lines at bad moments, though I did notice that you're rhyming scheme isn't quite... a scheme. Though that's not necissarily a bad thing, I think throwing in a few more well-placed rhymes would've made this poem even better than it is. But anyways, that is only my opinion. The line "Please, please forgive me" is quite powerful... in itself, it conveys the angel's feelings well.

[Fantasyfairy]

Ah, such perfect love. The love of an angel for the love of a mortal. This poem is like a roller coaster ride. from happiness, to saddness in a sudden dip, from fear and pain to love and sorrow. I really enjoyed reading this beautiful work hun XX

[Dawn Jones]

Wow... epic. I can't write poetry that long... congrats. I love angels. :)

[Ara Kayman]

I like the imagery here. Very intense. Also, very much like the lyrics of an Evenescence song. I like it, but it could use some work.

[Thea M. Joy]

This piece is full of such sadness but it is beautifully written and I'm glad the tone lightens in the end! Gorgeous, girl!

[H. A. M.]

It's the length of this and the tone that made me think of the song of Hiawatha.
"Please, please forgive me,
i cannot stay here anymore.
Every time i look at you I see,
what I gave up forever more." I could easily picture opposite sexes in this. You put this heavenly being thru a lot to get to the one they love the most. In the end it's worth the effort. Like that's what they had to get thru to get to their love.
"now I rejoin my love,
thanking my friends above.
And now my face is dry,
for I refuse to cry.
And I love each Heavenly friend,
for now I get my happy end." Well done

[The Lovely Sound Of Cra..]

Oh wow.... I liked it a lot. Beautiful use of words that really show emotion and life. I thought it was great! Thanks for sharing!

[Ale Blevins]

OMG this poem is so beautiful! the lines so beautiful! your a great poet and i love your poems!!!