Spirals

Old. 8th grade.

 

Spiraled thoughts All transcend into another Down a stairway Into everything I tried to forget The windows Seem to call out my name As I descend farther And tell me to punch out the glass And jump Maybe then it won’t take so long For life to get worse They say it always gets worse Before it gets better If your life seem like It can’t get any worse Does that mean that Someday it will seem to just keep getting better?

Reviews

[nostal]

Pretty nice. I don't know why but i was thinking about the book and movie Fight Club while reading this although the themes are different. In your poem you say that if things can't get any worse then someday things might get better, while in Fight Club its:
you have to loose everything, to gain something.

[Fear Corrupts!]

Hmm,
this is pretty good for a 13 year old, or so.
My favourite line is:
"Spiraled thoughts
All transcend into another
Down a stairway
Into everything I tried to forget"
That line sounds pretty advanced for a elementary school kid.

[ Fear Corrupts! ]