Bad

Just once

I’d like to do something

really, truly, awfully

wrong:

sleep in from work,

not call Mom,

steal something nice,

cheat on you with some guy,

go out on the town and raise hell,

burn down the house,

get drunk,

get fat,

get high,

forget to tell you I love you,

tell someone what I really think of them --

but without consequence.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Poe would say..."with impunity"

the heart wants to get crazy, but the head warns us against it.

wow, how much we miss out on because of that.

the fantasies are fun, though.

[DaughterNature]

I completely agree! It's difficult to find a place where the heart and head can agree. Thanks for the review!

[lady sunshine]

you know what picture i get in my mind as i go through this? that carefree girl i had always wanted to be! :) great framing.... no doubt you are one of my favorite writers over here! :)

[DaughterNature]

Wow, thank you so much for the kind reviews!

[Frieda P]

There are ALWAYS consequences in life, but some are well worth the bite.

[Cory Barrett]

Simply: cheat on a lover

Change the subject form the specific "you", to the ambiguous "lover".

[Cory Barrett]

This is so great! Not only is the writing itself awesome but the construction of the piece is so dynamic. The punctuation actually dictates to the reader how the poem should be read. Leaving very little room for reader to have to interpret, only to feel the emotion of the speaker.

The only part that catches me is the "you" in the 7th line. It takes me from a the speaker speaking to me, me overhearing the speaker talk to her boyfriend or husband.

That aside, I am kind of in love with this piece.

[DaughterNature]

Oh, wow, that's pretty high praise -- I very much appreciate that! How do you think I could change the lines referring to "you" to make them read better?

[Cory Barrett]

Simply: cheat on a lover

Change the subject form the specific "you", to the ambiguous "lover".

[Kamari's]

I like it and I would also love to do things with out problems following a true fantasy to do as you wish you wrote this well

[AKMaleeke]

It would be nice to be bad without any consequence. I would be on the next train if that was the case. I think a lot of people (including myself) feel similar which makes this relatable. I liked the poem but would have enjoyed reading more details.

[DaughterNature]

More details? What else should I add? I could definitely turn this into a full-blown litany-style poem.

[AKMaleeke]

I would inquire more on how you would feel when experiencing the bad. Would drives you to get to that point and how does it feel when you reach it.

[Woody]

yes, I believe it would be really nice to break the monotony and be "bad' once in a while.
very nicely expressed.