Three friends are returning from their first big mission done for the Adventuring Guild, but can they make it back safely from the snowy forests of the north?
I actually like the writing. I like the creativity. It is easy to read. I think the dialogue is fine if this piece is meant to be a part of a lengthy fantasy novel. The dialogue attempts humor and does not fall flat. I really like the choice of names, they are cohesive.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
I just realized that I should upload the revised version that also has the second chapter. Thank you.. read moreI just realized that I should upload the revised version that also has the second chapter. Thank you for the feedback, as well!
I actually like the writing. I like the creativity. It is easy to read. I think the dialogue is fine if this piece is meant to be a part of a lengthy fantasy novel. The dialogue attempts humor and does not fall flat. I really like the choice of names, they are cohesive.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
I just realized that I should upload the revised version that also has the second chapter. Thank you.. read moreI just realized that I should upload the revised version that also has the second chapter. Thank you for the feedback, as well!