Into Dream

I had one of those dreams where you're making love to someone you care about deeply (for me a lady friend) only as everything is going your way you wake up.

What unforgiving cruelty it is, when you visit me

in my sleep. Your pale green eyes stir great lover's

wisdom in me, forgetting everything I was, leaving

everything I cherished behind for the moment

we began to share.

A night together, that can turn

Nature's love to envy. A beautiful truth it felt,

I could cease altogether, gaze on you,

fix myself on you, swear

myself to you...and you to me.

Just for a tiny moment,

you and I.

Together.

But Nature was in work

that night. Usurping my mind,

playing my thoughts to confuse my sight.

Creating a gentle land where sleep

reigns, switching those what was thought

reality into dream.

It felt like dying, the moment I woke.

You were lost within me, a cruel joke.

I lie awake, hoping your dream would come again,

but as each night passed you were quiet,

a still memory asleep within me.

But I am not pressed by this realty,

Within these dreams purpose spreads, showing us

futures and love's possibility and many things unread.

(Guidance to win your heart,

to create a reality's dream

rather than dream reality.)

Reviews

[Geon Quuin]

First off, welcome to Writer's Cafe community. Now that that is said and done, let's move on to the review, shall we? The poem in itself is quite interesting. The stanzas are structured in a way that is, in a sense, unique. The message is very straightforward and the fantasy is there. The parenthesis at the end, I think, also adds some additional flavor to the overall taste of the entire poem. It pretty much sums up what it was you had to say to your audience. I'm an excellent ender to this decent poem.