The Dark Passenger

there is someone who follows me around 

making my heart and soul his home 

filling it with darkness and hatred 

welcoming him as if a long lost brother 

filling this void inside me 

whispering thoughts no mortal should hear 

this dark prince is always lurking 

in the shadows where he belongs 

making sure I never stray 

to far from the darkness within 

I have accepted this demon 

I have lived with him since the beginning 

of my downward spiral of hatred 

my heart and soul blackened 

my blood turned to poison 

that flows through my veins 

this dark prince has made me 

who I am today, tomorrow and forever 

everyone asks about the thoughts 

that occur in my twisted head 

if I let people in they might 

see that I am who this 

dark passenger wants me to be 

Reviews

[gram linski]

great stuff, we are all afflicted with the darkness within, you express this inner demon/friend with great style, the dark passenger has made you a fine writer

[JR]

I think everyone experiences the duality of soul. You give a great sense of what it's like to give into those impulses and become the very thing we didn't want to become. Technical point... "to far from the darkness within.." should be "too." You have a great, consistent voice that you carry through the piece from start to finish. Very interesting read.

[Curtis.Lenker]

Thank you for your lovely comment and Ill change that.

[Sira YR]

I had to read over this twice, it was so thought provoking. I like how it just flows with no breaks in between and like LauraKate said it's like the protagonist is being haunted and has just become complacent and in a way one with his or her demon. Very dark, ominous, and thought provoking. Great read.

YR.

[Curtis.Lenker]

Thanks for reading and your kind words.

[Laura Kate]

This cuts so deep! It's like the protagonist is being haunted, could be likened to that terrible feeling of being followed and not being able to escape something in our nightmares. What I find really interesting about this is that the two are familiar like brothers. It sounds like a cycle of being able to temporarily rid yourself of the darkness but never being fully free, and eventually almost giving in towards the end of the poem. I really enjoyed this, looking forward to reading more from you!

[PandaPeaceful]

A captivating read. I wonder whether the dark prince is he who represents the darkness within everyone.