Wish you were here

How I wish you were here 

so I could stare in  your eyes 

and know everything is ok 

missing you is the worst feeling 

knowing your hurt I can not bare 

to see you in so much pain 

hearing your voice brings back 

memories of your promises of forever 

your picture cuts me like knife 

wishing I could take it all away 

knowing there is nothing I can do 

regretting the life we lead together 

maybe its for the best for us 

being broke apart away from one another 

still loving the nightmare of a life we had 

wishing you were here to hurt me over and over 

your love was like a poison in my veins 

slowly killing me and draining my life away 

yet I have to sit here and wonder why

I wish you were here 

Reviews

[Lacey]

I really love this poem it has a lot of truth and meaning behind it reminds me of a lot of my mom's relationships

[JR]

For some reason, it seems the more toxic and damaging the relationship, the more we crave it. I've had some like this. I also wish they were back. Good job capturing the feel of that toxicity into words.

[barleygirl]

The strength of your writing is that you can reach down deep & bring out those tortured feelings. The strength of this poem in particular comes in the last 7 lines -- where you finally get more specific about what went down between these 2 people. Up until that point in your poem, even tho your urgent expression is well-crafted, it's all general & not telling us the details of why things feel this way. Did this guy put a gun to her head? Did he spit in her face? Did he cut up the quilt that she made him? Did he maim her dog? I mean, how bad was this guy? If you do not paint us a vivid detailed picture of what's going on between these two, then your poem fades back into the background, with all the other poems that generally describe heartbreak pain (and there are millions!) So, I'm not saying to change this poem, becuz it's a strong poem . . . this is just overall info to take in mind as you continue writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Curtis.Lenker]

Thanks for your kind words and criticism.

[Laura Kate]

It's a difficult situation to be in, where you might only find comfort for your pain from the very person who causes you the pain. Feels like entrapment, I think you have expressed this sentiment of helplessness very well. I hope that this lifts for the protagonist in time.
Best wishes,
Laura

[Curtis.Lenker]

Thank you so much for your kind words.

[MissEnigmas]

"If you were my poison, then why are you my remedy?" Sometimes these feelings stem from habit, yet in other situations human coping skills tell us we should learn to "hate" the very being we used to love. Beautifully written.

[Curtis.Lenker]

Thank you very much