My Promise

A promise I made to blade when I had a bad cutting problem.

This is my promise to you 

no matter how dark things are 

you were always there. 

No matter the pain I feel 

your my sanctuary. 

In this dark room I sit

while I grasp you in my hand.

You are my only true friend.

You were with me in my past,

and your here now in the present.

My future is not clear but I know

you will be by my side. 

I love the feeling you give me.

The sharp edge against my skin.

A stinging sensation as my skin parts

dripping precious red rubies. 

My promise to you is this 

you will be my life, my family,

my only true friend. 

Reviews

[Jess]

Beautiful sentiments. You have effectively expressed friendly emotions. It flows nicely. The wording is simple yet sweet.

Here's a little thing to correct:
''Your were with me in my past,''- in the starting its 'you were' not 'your were'.

Otherwise, great work.

[R.M.C]

A really good piece. Your intentions come across clearly thanks to the small pieces of effective imagery you use (good enough to make the reader worry for you). On the tetchy side, there are two little things I would like to bring to your attention: you've wrote "your" instead of "you're" on a few occasions and in the fifth line from last, it should be "A stinging sensation" not "I stinging sensation".