Tempest

Caught in a tempest

Winds of fate whipping

I can only give my best

So long as I keep willing

~

I try to claw my way free

Demons clutch at my ankles

I long for fields so serene

As the past binds me in shackles

~

Embers and ashes in the air

Stone and rock as far as sight

Now is not the time for fair

For life, I must now fight

~

Monsters claw at my flesh

Carving at my bare soul

Real or not, I don't guess

As I fight on the coals

~

Light shines on me as I dance

To the song of woe and brood

Even as I hold my stance

I will see this night through

~

Caught in this tempest

Winds of fate and binds

I will give only my best

As I see you on the other side

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Amazing job in this poem, I love the rhyme scheme and the fact that it can be read with an adventurous and startling tone. The simple descriptions you give in very few words erupt a lot of creativity that lays in my mind, I can picture the scene of the poem very nicely. Excellent job, Keep penning!

[Leigh]

Very moving and well structured

[Relic]

A very enjoyable read. You've conjured up the darker side with great imagery, metaphors, and a flair for the macabre.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Good work tying figuative image of a gale to the literal trails of life.

[Seanne Tholltree]

nice lines:
Embers and ashes in the air

Stone and rock as far as sight

Now is not the time for fair

For life, I must now fight

[Bridget Murphy]

Wow, the words used in this poem made me think of a ship out at sea in the middle of the storm. It was so full of adventure and life and death, this was a very exciting poem, I throughly enjoyed every word!

[N.A.S.S]

Wow...nicely written. Even more angst than the other one but more directed, more focussed, more descriptive, more adventurous in its tone. Well done.