Vindicta

Before one can be victorious, there must be vengeance.

As the fires climb and the ashes fall
I bear witness to many a crime
You threatened my family, one and all
Vengeance will be mine, this is the time

~-~

In the fields, bodies fester and rot
Your path, a trail of blood and flames
This resistance isn't for naught
You will be stricken down in shame

~-~

Your armor in the red sun of the dawn
Smeared in soot and covered in crimson
Your sword, claimer of lives of the pawns
Dried blood caked across in ribbons

~-~

Our blades meet, our strength shown
That evil smile of yours, an atrocity
In this battle, we fight on our own
We carve at each other with ferocity

~-~

You call me a fool
I call you tyrant
You say I am a tool
I say I am only defiant

~-~

With another hit, you are brought down
That sadistic smile wiped clean
The blood that is your own drains out
The ground wet in a red sheen

~-~

Many graves to be made for the lost
But today I will revel in this
For you were brought low, at great cost
But here and now, I am Invictus

Author's Note

Invictus: Latin for Victorious. Vindicta: Latin for Vengeance.
Kind of wanted to make a 'prequel' to Invictus, and this is what I came up with.

Reviews

[SignifiedG]

Hey man, I like this one a lot. One suggestion, I think you could go longer with this. The sentiment of vengeance is clear, but this could be incredibly powerful if I as a reader know why he was out for vengeance. Your antagonist has very general traits...I think if it were more personal to the protagonist, this poem could literally punch me in the face. Let me know what you think!

[Bridget Murphy]

Wow, this poem is really good! Favorite line" Your sword claimr of lives of the pawns" A really good poem!!!

[Larry Dyson]

very nice write...can you try writing one ..or this one in prose ?...just rewrite with the rules you used the first time...very good

[TheElfPrincess]

I like how you made Invictus actually go after Vindicta. A wonderful poem, another story within it. I truly enjoyed it. Well done.

[Pradnya]

nice rhyming ,its really good

[Macy A. Brown]

Great writing

I like the rhythm. And the pairing of Victory with Vengeance.

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I can see the relation to Invictus. I like the rage and emotion; that vengeful valor. Awesome write.

[Ruth]

Chilling! Such a topic is not easy to write about and you have done so well love :) A cruel balance but exorcised in a thrilling manner! xx