15

how the world makes me feel on my birthdays.

Today i turned 15

In a world pushing me to be 16,

Today i turned 16

In a world pushing me to be 17,

Today i turned 17

And didnt care what they want me to be

The world pushed me my whole life,

But today i turned 17 and started to push back

Today i turned 18, but they dont know that

Ignored i grew at my own pase 

In a world where you should be 16 at 15,

I grew up on my own

They said i should be 19 but in my head i am 20

i didnt follow their path because,

In a world where 16 is the new 15 i refused to grow up

Author's Note

If i made any grammar mistakes i am sorry, but please tell me so i can improve. This poem was inspired by how people treated me when its my birthday.

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

"pase" is spelled "pace"

I get it... you're aging and you think it's unfair. Anything else you'd like to add? Or will you just be bitching about the most obvious thing every single one of us has ever seen or dealt with? Wait till you become an adult.... you'll find this a pretty redundant thing to write about real fast.

Also... uncreative and quite frankly a waste of time. Sorry... call em like I see em. You asked me to read this thing.... It's shallow, and I find it lacking for that reason.

[savannah estrada]

I see how it could seem like i am bitching but this is not about how i think it is unfair, this is about how everyone is trying to grow up too fast. I believe that they should slow down and take their time in life, that is the line "In a world where 16 is the new 15 i refused to grow up". but thank you for helping me improve my writing skills, but i urge you to actually take time when you read other peoples writing and look for under lying meaning, not everyone writing is what it says, some writing is what it doesn't say.

[Davidgeo]

I got that. You're not conveying a complex topic... not even an obscure one. I think you write simple and you don't know it. Now, if you wrote simple and you did know it you'd be on to something.... sadly, that's not what you're doing. Try harder, integrate more. Don't lean on that "not everyone's writing is what it says but what it doesn't say" BS. You weren't shooting for word economy or subtlety. That's pretty clear. Own your mistakes, don't fabricate excuses... makes you look like a clown.

[Darian B.]

I know exactly what you mean, I just had my birthday and it was like nobody cared and so I didnt either. Its like the world wants us to be exactly what we arent and it doesnt matter if we try to fit their desired image for us, they just create a new one. At some point, we have to just stand up to the world and stop caring what others think. The only error I see is that pace is spelled with a c but other than that, I love this poem. You capture a problem in today's society in a really clever way while talking about your experience with it.

[savannah estrada]

thank you so much for the review. i completely agree on how we have to just create a new way to not fit in an be our self's.