The Angel's Soldier

She doesn’t believe in love at first sight,

but when she saw the shadows over his eyes,

She saw herself in the dark

She’s become an angel of the night

Staying close wherever he might lurk

 

There’s a soldier guarding his heart

Created by a boy who grew up in pieces

But she will give him her hand

Hoping the beast releases

 

She will kiss each scar that they gave him

One will never be from his angel’s

She will fight the monsters that keep him imprisoned

He told her she was his vision

 

He’s shattered and bruised,

A soldier standing alone

His heart will come together,

When his angel comes home

Author's Note

Thanks a bunch for reading! I'm sorry it's been so long since I've written any poetry, but I should be here more frequently now that't I've finished trade school.

Reviews

[pinhead07]

I really enjoyed reading this from the beginning! "She doesn’t believe in love at first sight, but when she saw the shadows over his eyes, She saw herself in the dark. She’s become an angel of the night
Staying close wherever he might lurk." Great writing. Great poem. "She will kiss each scar that they gave him. One will never be from his angel’s"
She will fight the monsters that keep him imprisoned
He told her she was his vision" Really makes the poem what it is.
"He’s shattered and bruised, A soldier standing alone
His heart will come together,
When his angel comes home" Poignant ending.

[Dark Poet]

Thank you so much for the review! Everything you said makes me feel better amd that ive improved

[Pseudonym Mindless]

Absolutely beautiful poem. There are no words to express the emotions inspired, and the images. The first line captured me, and I was not released until the last.

[Dark Poet]

Thank you so much! I love capturing someone

[DoormanDan]

I feel like there is a play on words here. Is the "soldier" as you put it the actual, physical solider here? That's what I drew from the last few lines of this piece! Anyway, I really enjoyed this piece a lot. I think you did a wonderful job with describing the relationship between the soldier and his angel in a poetic fashion, and I felt a rather warm aura emanating from this piece. You may have been gone a long time, but you've made quite a comeback piece here.

I read your "About the Author" section, and just wanted to say it's good to hear that you've overcome your old mindset. I'm currently in the process of overcoming that myself, so you have my respect. Keep up the great work, and stay strong! :)

[Dark Poet]

It is not actually. Its a man whos been forced to be like a soldier because of what he had to go through.
Thank you very much! Its been a long road but im finally there. You stay strong yourself:)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the story in the poem and the flow of thoughts leading to hopeful ending.
"He’s shattered and bruised,
A soldier standing alone
His heart will come together,
When his angel comes home"
All of us need gentle touch and kind heart. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Emily]

I really like this!
Great idea for a poem!!
Keep on writing!