Our World

Life couldn't taste sweeter than this
Gazing at these stars we call ours
Inside a world we've created to become one
Learning how to love the mental and physical scars
Laying in this meadow,
Hand laced into yours
Melting from the heat of your finger tips
Carefully knocking down my doors
Blue eyes...blue eyes...
If love is just a drug keep me under
Let's make this ocean deeper
I'm going to disappear into the heat of your summer
I long for the morning,
When we face this world together
And we just keep falling
Whispering our love as if it were fragile
We'll thank these stars every night that we're here
How did they know?
Love me like you love your garden
You and I will forever grow

Author's Note

For You (You know who you are).

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

Reviews

[Porter]

A wonderful piece of emotion for who I'm sure was delighted to read it. You seem to have quite a grasp on seeing a relationship blossom in a sense and shape itself into a world only you and someone else know. A world within a seemingly normal world. Beautifully written. ~Never Forget

[Dark Poet]

Thank you! I appreciate what you said

[D.T.]

I love, love, love this piece. It's so beautiful and I really enjoyed reading it. Wonderful job.

[Lyingwithlions]

Beautiful piece. It's true, that it's written in the stars. :)

[terry smith]

Beautifully written, love is what makes our worlds oh so much more electric! I would say that every star is a love,and when one burns out another takes it's place.

[C. Lee Battaglia]

I really liked it Valentine!
I see so much potential in your writing!
My favorite part was, "I long for the morning,
When we face this world together
And we just keep falling
Whispering our love as if it were fragile"
Could you by chance read my story, "The Blonde Girl"?
Great job and keep up the great work!

C. Lee Battaglia

[Dark Poet]

I will have to read it later but ofcourse! And thank you

[Robot House]

Super vivid. My only suggestion would be to maybe have one, central metaphor to explore and develop instead of a bunch of different ones, but frankly I don't think much has to change. You got a whole nature-y thing going on.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Using nature, thoughts and hope create a powerful emotional poem.
"How did they know?
Love me like you love your garden
You and I will forever grow "
Above lines are true. Love is like a garden. Need care and concern. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[sinNsincerity]

Excellent writing, I love, "let's make this ocean deeper!" Quite beautiful!

[Simon Welsh]

This is so beautiful. I love it!

[MAC]

tis laced in intensity....though you were trying to let the reader feel that kick in the gut. excellent piece, you show such a strong style of writing.

[Dark Poet]

Thank you:)