Galaxies

I know I'm a little lost
My heart's been led astray too many times
But please don't run away
I hate that our story is such a cliche

Just look up at the sky and you'll find me
The galaxies' ashes live in my head
Kiss the stars and you'll feel my lips
Reach for the sun and you'll hold my hips

I'm not that far from you
Ask me why I paint the sky
I'll tell you my need for escape
And a story about rape

Read my poems carefully
You'll know where I'm hiding
In the shadows of dark matter I reside
Where you and my dreams collide

Author's Note

Thanks for reading!

Reviews

[Amber Lily]

This poem contains many emotional elements, but the ones I feel the most are sadness and hope. I'm a very firm believer in hope. If you have hope and motivation, things might just go how you want them to for once. Always try to keep positive vibes in mind on matter how bad the situation :)
I like how you refer to the galaxy as you, it makes me think that you like to be mysterious because there is so much about space that we don't know about. But one thing we do know, is that it is unfathomably beautiful :)

[Dark Poet]

Thank you for your kind review

[AaronFreitas]

"I know I'm a little lost
My heart's been led astray too many times
But please don't run away
I hate that our story is such a cliche "

I love that opening stanza... love the rhyming, how deep it is and the darkness in it. Loved it :)

[Stephen]

I really enjoy this piece of writing. I like to use personification and metaphors myself so i really like how you did that in this poem. This is a great piece. Thanks for sharing

[HummingMaster]

Truly. Amazing. its so wonderful and sentimental
what I like most about it is the
"Read my poems carefully
You'll know where I'm hiding
In the shadows of dark matter I reside
Where you and my dreams collide"

Can I ask what inspired you to write it?

[Dark Poet]

I have a passion for space. I paint it as well. And I'm a daydreamer and people always tell me to 'come back to earth'. So i included it all in one small love story

[HummingMaster]

Wow, and a piece of advice don't listen those who tell you things like that, that's your gift and it's an amazing one too :)

[Dark Poet]

Thank your so much!

[Perkele.7885]

This the first that I have read by you and I do not have much to compare to for your work for timing or consistency. I liked this one but, it needs more provenance, so the reader can buy the story that you are telling them.

[DoormanDan]

I usually don't pay much attention to that rating bar in the Stats menu at all, but I just have to say that I don't really understand how a poem like this has gotten such a low rating. If anything, this poem is excellent, if not MORE than excellent! The way you personified galaxies is just fantastic, and the imagery you've incorporated into this piece is just breathtaking. Out of all of the love poems(or at least I see this as a love poem, correct me if I'm wrong), this has to be one of the top 10 most beautiful ones I have ever come across(and I don't say that about love poems often). I'm actually really impressed by this, it really does take a good writer to write something this awesome, and it takes an even better writer to make the emotions bleed through the words so well.

100/100 all the way through the roof! :)

[Dark Poet]

Thank you very much for your kind words and reviews. I hinestly never actually look at the rating on my poems, only reviews. I write for me and to express myself amd if people don't like it, then oh well. I live for wonderful words like yours. It's very inspiring to read what you said. And again thank you very much!

[DoormanDan]

That is a good way to write. Never focus on getting the highest rating, just focus on writing what satisfies you at the end of the day, and accept whatever feedback comes. I respect that attitude, and you are most welcome :)

[Echoes of Eros]

How you spill your soul into the starlight, and give a certain music to the stars. This lets us have just a glimpse of the universe you hide within you; a universe vast and wild. xo

[Anjan]

This is really great.i dint really notice how good the rhyming is because I was totally lost in the emotion.

[Dark Poet]

Thank you!

[17thWhitePrince]

Really good piece indeed
The rhyme and flow was used well
Made total sense
At the end it leaves you wanting to know more

[yvo miki]

U know I'm here for u,love u

[Dark Poet]

Thanks hon:)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

very rosy and tuned in style...