Galaxies

I know I'm a little lost
My heart's been led astray too many times
But please don't run away
I hate that our story is such a cliche

Just look up at the sky and you'll find me
The galaxies' ashes live in my head
Kiss the stars and you'll feel my lips
Reach for the sun and you'll hold my hips

I'm not that far from you
Ask me why I paint the sky
I'll tell you my need for escape
And a story about rape

Read my poems carefully
You'll know where I'm hiding
In the shadows of dark matter I reside
Where you and my dreams collide

Author's Note

Thanks for reading!

Reviews

[Amber Lily]

This poem contains many emotional elements, but the ones I feel the most are sadness and hope. I'm a very firm believer in hope. If you have hope and motivation, things might just go how you want them to for once. Always try to keep positive vibes in mind on matter how bad the situation :)
I like how you refer to the galaxy as you, it makes me think that you like to be mysterious because there is so much about space that we don't know about. But one thing we do know, is that it is unfathomably beautiful :)

[Dark Poet]

Thank you for your kind review

[Hakim]

A lot of talent for such a young age, your only going to get better. The rhymes flowed nicely and the content was moving. well played!

Just a question, i get poetry may mean different things and is open to interpretation, but i didn't get "the galaxies' ashes live in my head". What does that mean? i thought maybe your head is clouded with a lot of thoughts or something along those lines... correct or incorrect?

[Dark Poet]

Sorta. I am always a day dreamer and i love space and I spray paint it and ive always felt a little like i was lost, out there, like space where no one could understand me. So i felt like making the connection between space as my confusing and yet somehow beautiful mindset went well together. So i was being descriptive as if space WAS me. I dont know if that makes sense?
And thank you for the review!

[Hakim]

Oh i see. Yeah makes sense. Bit of a long story behind such a simple sentence - very deep. I guess i was kinda right though so pat on the back for me haha ;)

[Dark Poet]

Yes it is. I realized it was confusing but i write for me, not others. Hah yes

[Cody]

Very well done. I think you wrote something that everyone can relate to but you put it into a beautifully unique fashion.

[Joey K]

I enjoyed it. Perfectly equal in happy and sad.

[SuspectGray]

Beautiful and sad at the same time.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Eloquent & beautiful..
Dark & vice..
Felt like the poet is beckoning the reader to indulge in some kinda game..
Very well written.
I liked it..!

[jeannemarie coulter]

i loved this one...the images carried me out beyond the rim into dark space and time...a place i love to be...well penned

[Valentine]

Some of your lines are nice, others confuse the story you are trying to tell. Valentine

[Mr_M]

There seems to be a lot of astronomy themed writings lately, and I too have writen a story about the stars. A theory that somehow we are linked to a stream of thought. It is why films always seem to follow a certain subject on a yearly basis, be it zombies, world destruction etc

I thought this is a fantastic poem, and I prefer short stories. I also like the format the way it has not been forced... the world seemed to be on topic and hand picked individually. It has a very personal feel about a subject that can help but grow to love more.

[Dark Poet]

Thank you very much

[Aries1984]

It's 100 percent from me. This poem reminded me of something similar I wrote to the parents of a student who passed away when I was a senior in high school.