I Don't Deserve This

I don't deserve this

I shouldn't have to cower as you pass

Meeting your eyes can't be a sin

What makes you so much better than me?

LOOK AT YOURSELF DARLING

DO YOU HONESTLY BELIEVE SOMEBODY COULD LOVE THAT?

THAT'S RIGHT, KEEP YOUR HEAD DOWN

YOU BELONG IN THE SHADOWS

I don't deserve this

My thoughts and words are meant to be heard

I'm a person too

Would you please treat me better?

DID YOU FORGET THEY DON'T CARE?

NOBODY WANTS YOU

THEY DON'T WANT TO KNOW WHO YOU ARE

WAKE UP, CHILD, HE'S GOING TO LEAVE AND SHE ALREADY HAS

I deserve this

All these nights I spend shaking in my bed

Knowing I'll never be worth something

I'll just listen to that voice in my head

And just continue loving

Author's Note

The dialogue we have with our biggest enemy, ourself.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and honest emotions. We can be led by desperate need.
"I'll just listen to that voice in my head
And just continue loving"
The above lines Solid and meaningful. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[PoeticSorcery]

I struggle with accepting myself as well. I can't look in the mirror without feeling either disappointed or confused. either the person I see is truly me and I'm completely unappealing, or I have no idea who they are and, of course, they are completely unappealing.

[Pete]

You come through as an honest, caring person. You can never go wrong writing from the heart because the heart doesn't lie. I think you write very well. You have a talent.

[Dark Poet]

Thank you very much

[Pete]

Would you be willing to look at some of mine? Thanks.

[Dark Poet]

Yes i will check some out as soon as i get the chance:)

[Jaspar]

I know how you feel my friend. Beautiful poetry.

[yvo miki]

awww right im here for you

[Cole Son]

sounds like this is personal. Ouch :)

[DoormanDan]

I read your author's note, and can say from my own experience that those are 100% true words.

Now that that's out of the way, I have to say that this is a powerful piece. I can tell that you have a lot of thoughts on this topic, and you are absolutely right, you do deserve better treatment. I'm not just saying this, but I think that you are one of the strongest writers I have ever come across on this website, and any where else. Fantastically said :)

[Dark Poet]

I've never gotten a better compliment about my writing:) thank you again

[DoormanDan]

You're welcome :)

[TheLostMind]

The emotions in this one are quite palpable... Life is always unfair ma'am... Nobody, not even you have the right to judge who deserves what.

I loved the way you have structured your poem.. Like a conversation. . Look at this line -
"DID YOU FORGET THEY DON'T CARE?" - They just don't care. Your expectation that they should care is the root cause of all sorrow. If they don't give a damn, it's their loss, they are missing a wonderful person. Never let anyone underestimate you (and that includes yourself as well)..

A good write :)

[Dark Poet]

Thank you so much!

[TheLostMind]

You are welcome.

[jb]

We all have mixed feelings....great expression :)

[AaronFreitas]

This is a beautiful write. I am glad you shared this... I love the way you write, your style and your thoughts. Also, I like on your profile where you said you're sad enough to write poetry again... I guess that's kind of how I got back to writing. Awesome work I look forward to reading more :)