Tremble

You asked if you made me nervous

The thought left me breathless and wordless

I had supposed you already knew

That the way my body trembled told you it was true

 

I noticed when my thoughts were consumed

You crawled into my mind so I’d only think of you

Aware you would make me be broken and confused

Somewhere along the way my fondness grew

 

I heard you in my dreams

Although a pleasant sound, I woke wistful

I had a sickening feeling you’d never listen to my vow

To you I am an annoying whisper

 

In your presence I would cower from reticence

An intense gaze I could never meet

The tremor in my hands would be more than evidence

That you made my iron walls crumble and weak

 

There was a bitter murmur in your eyes

Something I craved to hear

I could see past those persistent lies

Quietly you wanted someone to make the pain disappear

 

Listen to my pitiful voice

Choking on words meant to impress

I had supposed you already knew

You affected me with effortless success

Author's Note

I've been watching couples lately and wondered what it felt like to feel completely involved into one single person to the point you had no control over how you felt around them.

Reviews

[IgniteToWrite]

That was a very detailed and hooking poem. I started and i couldn't stop until i finished. I love the fourth stanza in this pom. And yes I love the way every word in this poem was woven together to create a piece with true meaning. I applaud this piece. Great job!

[Lucid Dreamer]

I love what you wrote in this stanza! I liked how it displayed multiple emotions.

"I heard you in my dreams
Although a pleasant sound, I woke wistful
I had a sickening feeling you’d never listen to my vow
To you I am an annoying whisper"

[Dark Poet]

Thank you!

[Simon Welsh]

This is so wonderful. Nice one.

[Black Star Adept]

Loved it! Want to read more!