Prince Melancholy

Evening began to fall

it appeared silently on a breeze

to my appeal

I stretched my legs down the street

Oh, in surprise I stood

a face from my past

now in front of me, so vivid

but them good ol` memories fooled my guillable mind

on my own in a park

rooted and timid

it was only a ghost

my sorrow hung my head

not only dead is my friend

but forever lost

Reviews

[ljuky]

Wow, man, you certainly know how to pack a lot of emotions in a small poetic "package". In just a few lines you managed to express a chill atmosphere and a peaceful state of mind, which was soon replaced with suprise, old memories of good times which were within a second cut down to a cramping feeling in stomach.

Great job, things like this happen in very little time in real life, a you did really good in bringing the reader a rollercoaster of emotion in a whiff of time.

Cheers!

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Respect, Ljuki

I appreciate your informative and honest comment. I am glad to see you enjoyed reading my poem.