Tokyo, Japan

Under a blue bubble.

Cherry blossoms fresh spirits.

In soft and dark nights

Tokyo pulsates through Neon Lights.

Carried on a breeze 

a man with a face

now abandoned by twenty-one grams.

In the spirit of spring ...

departure worthy of a King.

Reviews

[Monica Chen]

I love the mood shifts in this poem (from peaceful scenery to night-life filled with energy and then back to a more tranquil mood again). This poem really fits my image (I've never been to Tokyo) of Tokyo's famous cherry blossoms and night life scenes. :)

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I am glad to see that you found a pleasure in reading my poem, Monica Chen.

[HeyJadeXO]

I am feeling the overall vibes from this piece very good.

[Drama Child]

Nicely written and well worded imagery! Congrats on your win!

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Respect Drama Child

I am glad to read that you enjoyed it. I appreciate your congrats for the win.

[Strawberry Evil]

Ahh I love it. It really gives me the Tokyo mood that I miss so much. Well done! :)

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I appreciate your comment. Given that I have never been to Tokyo, it is a great compliment for an artist that my work made you reminisce on your time there.

[Strawberry Evil]

Wow for real? I would not have guessed that you never went there. No problem~

[kclyaine]

Nice imagery. I just don't understand the part "now abandoned by twenty-one grams" and what "outro" means?

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Hello Kcylaine.

I am glad to see a new reader . I am also glad to see that you are pleaed with my poem.
In general, you can always scroll down comments if you have questions. It is most likely other people had asked the same.

21 grams = it is believed that is how much soul weights.
Outro = the ending of a piece (mostly used in songs)

[ResiNoth]

I like the way the imagery clashes in this! Delicate and harsh, nature versus urban, lots of opposites. Definitely packed a lot in for how short a poem it is!

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I appreciate your honesty and time to write this informative comment.
I would enjoy reading some more of your insight on my other poems.

[Kyline Freed]

Although I'm wondering who this 'man' is. This is overall an amazing poem You especially did a great job of painting a vivid image!

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I am glad to see that you enjoyed your time reading it.

[B]

I wonder who is this man

A very mysterious piece
Got me thinking

Good job

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I appreciate your time that you took to read and comment my poem.

[Bear]

ネオン右より多くのネオンの光にある東京ニューヨークとラスベガスの置くよりも一緒に詩を興味深いが、私はわからないが何を意味する (放棄二一グラム) まだそれを読んで楽しんだ。
Translation
Neon is right, there is more neon light in Tokyo than New York and Vegas put together, interesting poem but I am not sure what you mean by (now abandoned by twenty-one grams) still enjoyed reading it.

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Here is my favorite papa-bear in all of woods from all over the world.

According to a rumor a soul weights 21 grams .

[Bear]

Really? That's cool, I will have to store that and let it inspire a poem. Thank you!

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Glad I was of help , Papa-Bear !