Forget it

He acts like a zombie when he sees me. That makes me feel like I mean nothing. Is that all ill ever mean to him.

When I walk by the halls I can barely see his face because he keeps it covered up. I get scared cause I don't know what to do. I panic but I ignore him, I mean his never talked to me anyways. But he has no idea for how long I've been waiting for him to say something. Not just walk past me like i'm a nobody. Is that all i'll ever be to him. He has no idea how much that hurts me. But forget it, what was I thinking right. I guess my life just means nothing! I hate him but I love him. I get nothing in return, not even a hello.

Reviews

[Hailey Juliet]

This is a very good little story. I like the concept behind it, a short piece describing a feeling that does not translate into reality. You do a good job of expressing the feelings that run through the character's mind as they see they see him pass. Frustration is a feeling i sense i this poem, frustration enough tomake the main character forget their muse. I would recommend doing a few revisions to the grammar, and i think that the presentation of the story could be a bit more visually interesting as it is a short piece, sort of like a poem, but other than that, great job! Also, I am open to helping with some revisions if you want, feel free to message me at any time:)

[Elmarie]

Hi Daisy

Great to see raw emotion translated into words. I read Hailey's review and smiled as I was going to add a lot of the points she mentioned. Blessings :)