From the Mouth of Babes
A Book by Darkness'Embrace
 A nameless, faceless girl, and the man who calls her his own.  © 2011 Darkness'Embrace
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Constructive feedback is greatly appreciated.
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Unusual piece of "heavenly length." I think you might want to cut it back a bit, only because, it seems with poetry that "less might be more." The shifts between italics, bold and normal are interesting, but you should ask yourself WHY they are necessary. The only thing I would be careful is using the word "fierce." It seems that MANY today use that word to refer to people or writing, or an attitude. It has become a cliché…unfortunately.
Don't know if what I've said is constructive, except to suggest that condensing your thoughts might be appropriate...
Posted 13 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Unusual piece of "heavenly length." I think you might want to cut it back a bit, only because, it seems with poetry that "less might be more." The shifts between italics, bold and normal are interesting, but you should ask yourself WHY they are necessary. The only thing I would be careful is using the word "fierce." It seems that MANY today use that word to refer to people or writing, or an attitude. It has become a cliché…unfortunately.
Don't know if what I've said is constructive, except to suggest that condensing your thoughts might be appropriate...
Posted 13 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Darkness'EmbraceOttawa, East, Canada
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Just another person that is willing to listen, but needs to be heard. more..
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