She Would Not Give Up

"She Would Not Give Up"

I drifted far, too deep to reach,

The world a blur, no ground to stand,

I turned away from every hand,

Afraid to feel, too lost to speak.

She asked me once, twice, maybe more,

To share a meal, a moment’s grace,

But I, too broken, turned my face,

Too used to closing every door.

Then one day, she stood her ground,

Refused to let me slip away,

Her voice, a beacon, led the way,

No more retreat, no fear was found.

She would not take “no” as truth,

And in that simple act of care,

I saw the love, the hope, the dare

A spark of life, a spark of youth.

And in her eyes, I saw my worth,

A reason now to breathe and fight,

She held me tight, she brought the light,

A love that pulled me back to earth

Reviews

[Dave W.]

I really like the flow. I liked the line "She would not take “no” as truth", what a great way to say she wouldn't take no for an answer. Good poem.

[camac1994]

Hi Darkmage, You are definitely on the right path! Your verses are magic!
I see the whole story before me as I read.
Slowly revealing. Clearly.
Love it!
Camac