Song of the Creator

A hymn of the Tagi people (from my fantasy novel)

The Earth does not turn on its own,

And the oceans don't move for themselves.

Our Creator, Creator, It moves in the Earth.

Creator, It moves in the Earth.

And the leaves do not turn for no reason,

Every bird, every flower has a role.

Our Creator, Creator, It moves in the trees.

Creator, It moves in the trees.

So, let not your pride overcome you,

For the only power you have came from above.

Cherish peace, guard the light, and let your conscience guide you,

For there is only strength within love.

Creator, It lives,

Creator, It breathes,

Creator, It lives in love.

Creator, It moves with love.

Author's Note

Meant to be sung :)

Reviews

[The Archangel Gabriel]

That's so awesome. Made to be sung? That is what I mean is awesome! You have such a beautiful tongue. Wonderful piece. No comments on how to improve it? Make verse two and make Creator first lines at end a thing that is repeated between verses? But, keep this one and keep it posted, too, please! Great wrok!

[Ashley Flynn]

Thank you so much! Love your username :)

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Thanks for the good cheer! You brought a smile to my face. Well met!

[Richard]

it's very Christian ... is it? :)

[Ashley Flynn]

It can be, but I think any theistic spirituality can find truth in it.

[Richard]

Yeah and just from a writing point its a good poem

[Chris]

I was thinking it was the lyrics for a song BEFORE I reached your Author's note. It has THAT quality and rhythm.

[Misery]

A unique and inspiring hymn. Your Tagi people must be a wise folk. Wishing you the best of good fortune with your novel, dear Ashley.