My dear friend, Fear

My dear friend, Fear

A Poem by DarkHart
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My first work.

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The ear is a delicate 
My dear 
It listens and it feels
It interprets and heals
But I my friend 
I am what you can't Feel and can't heal 
I am the dark corners of your room 
I am the dead memory in your head 
I am the ram that raped the lamb
I am everything you cannot stand
You tremble and you squirm
You try to run but fail to hide
I am your friend
I am the voices in your head
I am fear
My dear and I love you no matter the consequence
  

© 2014 DarkHart


Author's Note

DarkHart
I am not good with punctuations for i am a delicate little idiot so please go easy on your
constructive criticism
and thank you for reading..
There is alot I didnt get to add to really fill in some of the blanks of the story that this poem portrays but I figured this was the best way to make it fathomable to read and interpret..

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if this isn't all, I'm very interested in seeing the rest.
Although my only criticism would be the last line and the second to last. maybe if you shifted up "My dear" to the line above, it would add more emphasis on that very last part and provide a better flow. I myself don't use punctuation, so I rely on the structure of my line to provide a rhythm and emphasize certain key parts.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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if this isn't all, I'm very interested in seeing the rest.
Although my only criticism would be the last line and the second to last. maybe if you shifted up "My dear" to the line above, it would add more emphasis on that very last part and provide a better flow. I myself don't use punctuation, so I rely on the structure of my line to provide a rhythm and emphasize certain key parts.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"I am what you can't Feel and can't heal "
i like how you make fear the thing they cannot feel it or heal or get rid of it.

"I am everything you cannot stand
You tremble and you squirm
You try to run but fail to hide"

i like how fear is all things things you loathe and cant accept and i like how the next line make the person tremble from it and runs from it but can never hide from it.





Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"I am what you can't Feel and can't heal" , great work man. Post more poems bro!


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 7, 2014
Last Updated on June 25, 2014
Tags: Dark, evil, mental, psychological, depression, fear, homicide, kill, schizophrenia

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Lets put it this way, I empathize with things you claim to be evil. I promote insanity and claim it as art.. I find beauty in what you call sin. Thats all you need and all I need to tell you.. more..

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