Things Unspoken

This life of ours

will come to an end

I don't want to regret

we left it as friends

We've talked about it

but talk is cheap

lets make this happen

and take the leap

I've bottled it up

for way to long

and the way I feel

this just belongs

So what do you say

do you want the same

and this thing between us

lets give it a name

We can fly together

like birds in the air

and be together

without a care

we would fit together

like pieces falling into place

I just want to get lost in you

and disappear without a trace

Now is our time

this is our chance

don't wait anymore

don't let this pass

Author's Note

So this was the first of its kind that i wrote, and now after a few years i'm still not sure i like it completely.

Reviews

[Lucifer Jones]

Very nicely done. You leave the reader questioning... which just means you pulled me in. Was it ever named? I like it... you should too.

[Darkgirl]

I think my issue is that it is unfinished, but at the same time that is the beauty of it. Thank you for making me realize that :))

[Lyn Anderson]

I like the font, and the style, but I see what you mean. It seems like two thought processes running together, and I think that is where you are stuck. Is it a woman who wants a brief No strings arrangement, or someone who wants something more but feels it will end anyway.

[Author Unknown]

we left it as just friends ( If you would just omit the word " just " , it would flow much smoothler and better )
We left it as friends ...
like pieces falling into place ( or like puzzles falling into place )

[Darkgirl]

I left the "Just" in it because some people seem to misunderstand what i was trying to get at but I agree it flowed much better without it, I shall remove it once again. Also toyed with the use of the word puzzle and have several versions of this with it in there but for reasons i'm not remembering i went with this version. Thank you for reviewing it an giving me some pointers.

[Author Unknown]

My pleasure Ms Darkgirl ... The final choice is yours . Its your piece ...

[the dude]

With all focused on our past and our future, the simplest, most important - and most untaught - is the frailty of the present. FEEL IT!! SHAKE IN IT!! DO YOU FEEL THAT? The slight breeze over your arms and legs, the subtle grinding of your teeth, your subconscious, ego, and id working feverishly to form a relate-able - maybe shareable thought? What can be more important than that? There will never EVER be another 'Now'! You can't plan it. You can't regret it. It's so f*****g fragile that, if left to ponder it, its already gone by. I quote you, "Don't Let It Pass!!" KUDOS I FELT THIS.

[Darkgirl]

Thank you :)

[Scott Metro]

I think it's quite nice...and did you ever give the thing between you two a name??
Well done.
Enjoyed it.
Scott

[Darkgirl]

After a fashion haha and then it very quickly went down the toilet

[Scott Metro]

Gee...but That's a familiar story.....lol
Scott

[SAYED THANGAL]

the inward and deep love is expressed in the poem, images and metaphors are striking, well done
sayed, India