My Heart

Yes it gives me life

Yes it keeps me breathing

But it still yearns for something...

What could it be?

Is it blood? No

Is it air? No

Is it beating right? Yes

But what could be missing?

What is it?

Oh wait...I remember now...

It yearns for love...

It yearns for happiess...

Two of those things in which I have yet to have...

Can someone help me with it?

Can somone give me love and happiness?
That I highly doubt...

My heart hurts so much...

I need love...

I need happiness...

My heart wants those things...

Its the only way to save my heart from darkness...

Save me...

Save my heart...

Reviews

[SilentDreamer]

I like it. Good end line- I think the end line is usually what makes or breaks a poem for me. If it doesn't end well it doesn't sound good. But this worked out well! I think a lot of people could actually relate to this, myself included. A dark poem but I'm sure you will find love and happiness. Great write!:)

[Sleepless]

aaaaaw this is amazing just lie the group awe-mazing lol this is really awesome i feel like this soemtimes im sure someone will save your heart someday just dont lose hope :)!

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Great poem. You had a typo on the first "happiness" you wrote~ the 'n' is missing.
I like your poem, they all seem about unrequited love or lack of love. Well written.

[just is]

You have to find that kind of happiness on your own.
It's hard to find it at times but it's there.
I really enjoyed the emotions in this.

[Gina]

It is really good I like a lot

[Corkee1808]

Amazing!

[Chris]

Strong write...with feeling.

[Lawrence Parlier]

Sad, fluid, succinct...Nice job!

[BS Johnson]

I liked this one alot. Very emotional. Heartfelt. Familiar. Good job, friend. :)

[Thomas Fogarty]

Great poem! I really enjoyed the imagery that you had, especially the heart beating and the blood. It is a haunting and emotional poem and you did a great job with it!

[Snarfy]

I thought that this piece was really effective in the sense that it successfully conveys the distinctive emotion and desire that it is meant to embody. You don't adopt an overly-complex or confusing style, therefore, your message comes across very clearly. It's something that lays everything out on the table, which is why it's so beautiful and representative of a human heart in need.