Forever Dead

No matter how many times I see your face

It remains dead

No matter how many times I hear your name

It remains dead

No matter times I hear how great you were

It remains dead

I try so many times to bring it back to life

I fail, it remains dead

I want it to come back, I really do

It use to bring me joy everyday

But now it bring nothing but tears in my eyes everytime I see your smiling face

I use to be like you

But after you died

My smile has died along with you

You were my smile...Now its dead...It will forever remain dead...

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

The ending seemed to really surprised me, I wasn't expecting that. I was expecting this to kind of be one of those love poems where you are writing to an obsessed lover or something, know what I mean? Anyways, I couldn't imagine this in a better way, the concept is really nice, and I really enjoyed this poem. Keep it up.

[ATG]

A very good poem about love lost. It was very well written and the word choice was great. The repitition added a great deal to the poem as well.

[Coyote Poetry]

A strong and direct poem. Anger can lead us to bad places. In time we will forget and heal from any type of pain. Better to smile and trick the world. Them to be looked at as sad and pitiful. I like the way you used words to twist the story in the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Regrets]

I like this write. Thanks for sharing.

[FelicityAllona]

well written :)

nice poem :)

[Sujash I. Purna]

hoping to put on a smile for someone whom you lost...is like hoping to be satisfied with a lost cause...I know how badly it aches the heart when someone so near and dear dies...even if a smile ever comes back...it's only a wistful...with tearful eyes...

Great work here Becky!

[Katrina Crago.]

This had amazing rhythm and persistencey :)
Good work :D

[Becky Clancy]

Thank you! :D

[Nicole]

I really like the rhythm in this piece too. It feels like it could be a song. :) Great work!