Steps of Love

For each and every step, which I moved closer to You, I took one step downward.

Ascending towards You, as You erotically stepped down.

The warmth from Your flaming heart, burns intimate with devotion.

I stepped headlong those painful, series of steps, to try and clutch Your heart.

Though ruefully it didn't feat, the heat has burned us away in time and point.

Descending them steps I relocated little and weak,

As the excitement from my fondness did drizzle.

The flames grew inside my heart, little, by little.

But, You were spiritless, harloting your body..

The agony from Your affection was to much to publish.

For you loved him, though felt left out of despair.

I advised You were my truthful affection,

But, it smite’s me by means of creation.

These steps of love I must commence to move on,

Onto this, now this love I deem has took me headlong the steps of love.

These steps lead me into love, but sent me to Hell.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Hi. It's been a while since I have been to your page. I like the way you have been presenting your work.
I believe you always took my corrections as they are intended -- as help.
Thus -- I would suggest fit as opposed to feat (although not necessarily necessary)
and TOO much to publish, and smites without an apostrophe.

[Ice QueenJen]

Wow,another interesting write; and you know they are in love yet instead of ascending to a happy place they both go down to shell! You certainly have a way of wording things differently.

[Dr. S. D. Blankenship DDiv., PhD., MA.]

Thank you.
~S. D. Blankenship

[M.D Leon]

certainly a well crafted piece, great execution of ideas though it could use a bit more intensity that is only a nitpick for the piece as a standalone poem is very good, excellent work and thank for entering.

[Flame DM]

Very emotional...was this about Cory? Well penned i might add

[ATG]

An intereresting poem. It was well written and entertaining. Keep up the good work.

[J.Black]

Hmm very interesting! This was good though.

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

Well done my friend.....one of your best to date in my humble opinion.....

Peace,

Bill :-)