Forgiveness

 

 

 

For this is the greatest gift 

Of all things, for life, love,

Regret, and sin are the worst 

Granted to you by the lowest

Insight and cast out by most

Very often is abused and

Everyone is misused as for

Nothing in this world is

Eternal and that is why

Some never say they are

Sorry, or forgive anyone.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Hannah!]

Another acrostic that I truly enjoyed--you are quite good at that, it would seem. I've always felt that forgiveness is a touchy subject, but I'm never sure why. It's never made sense to me to NOT forgive...staying mad at someone very rarely punishes them, and it makes a person bitter and unpleasant. XD

I will say that I was a bit confused by the lines "Granted to you by the lowest/Insight and cast out by most." I was not sure if the 'insight' belonged to the previous line, and had been brought down for the purposes of form--which makes all the sense in the world in an acrostic poem--or if it was actually the start of a new concept. Either way--the word insight just didn't seem to belong, somehow. Does insight grant people things?

Also...I feel like the poem...lost something because of the form. It was well-written and the form did add a certain je ne sait quoi (I am so pretentious, haha), but the sentiment seemed fine WITHOUT the acrostic piece, and sometimes I felt like sentiment was sacrificed for the sake of form--for example, there were times when your word choice seemed just plain awkward, and your line breaks were confusing. But these are really minor details in the end, because I did enjoy this poem--it's quite good as is and could be even better with a small bit of revision. Good job!

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This is one of the best acrostics I have read. It is so subtle I almost missed it. Forgiveness is the one aspect so many of us overlook in life forgetting that things don't last always until its too late. Truly nice work.

[Helena]

I loved this! Very well written acrostic my friend.

You know that to forgive others is much easier than to forgive yourself?

There are three kinds of forgiveness....

You can think of the people you wish to forgive and say to yourself...

a) I forgive you unreservedly....
b) I need to work on it more, but I will forgive you
c) I am not ready to forgive you..... yet.

~ Helena ~

[Samm]

HA ha yeah I see where your going with this. i love the way you write so good. I just can't stop reading. I am a big fan of acrostic poems and for that mater I love your poem. Its very heartfelt and very lovely.



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[Burr the Story Sorceres..]

Wow. I really like this poem. It is short, sweet, and to the point. I think your work is wonderful. Keep it up!
^_^

[Senzieser]

Forever the love is shown
Over the land and now in
Regret I live, my life in this
Gave my heart and soul for
Inlightment and you the only
Vulue in my life, but I love you
Even more now the before so
Never give up on me I will love
Each of you my best friends, I'm
Sorry about before, but now I
See I have gained so much too.

just an idea. WoO GO Shawn!!!!!!!!!!

Sen

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um, Forgiveness. the words you speak are so very true thanks for the read request.

Really injoyed this Great jOB.

Jake

[lauren emily]

Nice work!
Sometimes it's really hard to forgive someone..and you expressed that very well.
Great job, keep up the good work,
Lauren

[Jessica Fox]

good poem, it also seemed a bit preachy but that is ok for some. I would suggest one little thing since it is an acrostic maybe do something with the first letter to make it stand out from the rest of the words.

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

It sometimes is hard to forgive. But you can never let go of whatever ails you unless you do. I love this. Another good write and read.

Danni

[Adrian K. Smith]

While nothing is eternal, certain things approach the very limits of infinity, carried on through the many years by our words and our memories. We cannot see the end. We can only see parts of the past and parts of the now. In that, many cannot see the way to forgiveness - for others or for themselves.