Damned to sin

Damned to sin was my idea, however I would like to think Dr. Rick Puetter, for helping me with the story line and choice of words. ~S. D. Blankenship

I wrote this for you the one I knew,

but now I'm Damned from you too.

And now true love is lost with pain,
Damned am I and she is my bane.

You left me for someone that's new,
Damned am I, my dreams I eschew.

We loved this way every day,
Damned am I, loves most feeble prey! 

You laughed as you ripped out my heart,
Damned am I now that we're apart.

You are impaired most fleshly lust,
Damned am I, my passion now rust. 
 
I loved you and only you alone,
Damned am I and bereft my throne.  

For you alone my heart doth ache,
Damned am I, how my world doth shake. 

I miss her smile, her lips, and eyes so blue,
Damned am I that her love was not so true. 

I have great pain while she is well,
I know I'm damned, my life is Hell.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Chi Italy]

Ah I see a love issue approaching.....the reason you feel like this, is precisely because you feel and that is the key to being human imo. We have to take the rough with the smooth on our journey, sometimes it is hell on earth and then again sometimes it is pure bliss, an emotion I am wiling take the pain to have again and again....Luck in love to you, Tai

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

thanks for this amazing truly honest poem
its so great, thanks for entering into my poetry comp romantic
still reading all entries may take a while, thanks again

[Helen Crutchett]

A very fine 'couplet' you have penned here. I liked the stanzas and the story it told!

"I have great pain while she is well,
I know I'm damned, my life is Hell."

Well done! Good luck in the contest!

Helena

[Coyote Poetry]

I know this place my friend.
"I have great pain while she is well,
I know I'm damned, my life is Hell."
Sometime we must swim in hell to be able to find the light of hope again. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[BThomvanWart]

Oh man, this is definitely a piece of work. It's great. You chronicle how heartbreak feels and, especially, how it may have made you feel. The rhythm flows really well and it sticks together - something I don't see all the time. Sometimes when you're writing a prose, if you will, it can turn into a lengthy piece of work that ricochets from one topic to another or loses its idea midway through. But, you kept things on track and interesting, so it's very good work.

[Bear]

Well worded and your phraseology leaves a lasting impression, masterfully done, Standing Ovation! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Dr. S. D. Blankenship DDiv., PhD., MA.]

Thank you, Bear.

I am utterly pleased with this penmanship.
read more Thank you, Bear.

I am utterly pleased with this penmanship.

~S. D. Blankenship

[Ice QueenJen]

great poem and song, sorry it took so long to read!

[justjenn_2u]

Raw inner emotive words here. I enjoyed this and as I read the lines, each word fell into place. Bittersweet and thought provoking.

[Leran Vakem]

It is better to have loved and lost than to never have loved. Who ever said this never felt the pain when that special someone is gone. Pain that is so deep it can break the person completely.
This is a favourite of mine

[M.D Leon]

absolutely masterful! one of my favorite entries so far the word choice, the structure, the pace and the flow all very well crafted. In terms of construction this is very original. Great work