Damned to sin

Damned to sin was my idea, however I would like to think Dr. Rick Puetter, for helping me with the story line and choice of words. ~S. D. Blankenship

I wrote this for you the one I knew,

but now I'm Damned from you too.

And now true love is lost with pain,
Damned am I and she is my bane.

You left me for someone that's new,
Damned am I, my dreams I eschew.

We loved this way every day,
Damned am I, loves most feeble prey! 

You laughed as you ripped out my heart,
Damned am I now that we're apart.

You are impaired most fleshly lust,
Damned am I, my passion now rust. 
 
I loved you and only you alone,
Damned am I and bereft my throne.  

For you alone my heart doth ache,
Damned am I, how my world doth shake. 

I miss her smile, her lips, and eyes so blue,
Damned am I that her love was not so true. 

I have great pain while she is well,
I know I'm damned, my life is Hell.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Chi Italy]

Ah I see a love issue approaching.....the reason you feel like this, is precisely because you feel and that is the key to being human imo. We have to take the rough with the smooth on our journey, sometimes it is hell on earth and then again sometimes it is pure bliss, an emotion I am wiling take the pain to have again and again....Luck in love to you, Tai

[UpComesDown]

i liked it alot and i think it was a powerful piece... good job

[CLUTZ]

your life is not hell. feeling the way you did and still do is just a part of life. don't let someone else make you feel like you can't live without them, that just gives them power over you. don't give them the satisfaction of making you feel like crap. and everyone feels like this sometimes. you'll get through it. very nice.

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

wow....that was a very touching,heartbreaking, emotional piece.... i felt your pain as i read these dreadful words.... sorrow took the from of words, that turned out being beautiful, but still, sorrowful...

~may

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

This poem is sad and dark and i like it. Usually i don't like repetition, (because when i started out i killed it), but in this case it works well with the poem contributes to its flow. Its like something thats read at the begining, or end of a movie that gives it an extra boost. I really liked the last two stanza's though. Because it's like icing on the cake, and it makes the reader think, "he loved her so and she just let it go, and while he suffers on his own...she does not." *sigh* good job.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

A love that damns you to sin from a writer who damns' you to read his work. You have a nice writing style.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

So sad and heart broken a write. Beautifully penned. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[J. James Reider]

This is really solid, and the repetition works well in it. You did a great job in conveying the feeling of lost love, and the hopelessness that goes with it.

Typo alert: You ere inpired

Other than that everything was great and I commend your efforts! Nicely done.

[distefano 401]

i thought this was a..beautifully dark poem. the repetition worked really well for you, and you used a lot of good vocabulary. i enjoyed reading it.

[Tessa]

"I wrote this for you the one I knew, but now I'm Damned from you too."--- I really like this line. I really do.