Damned to sin

Damned to sin was my idea, however I would like to think Dr. Rick Puetter, for helping me with the story line and choice of words. ~S. D. Blankenship

I wrote this for you the one I knew,

but now I'm Damned from you too.

And now true love is lost with pain,
Damned am I and she is my bane.

You left me for someone that's new,
Damned am I, my dreams I eschew.

We loved this way every day,
Damned am I, loves most feeble prey! 

You laughed as you ripped out my heart,
Damned am I now that we're apart.

You are impaired most fleshly lust,
Damned am I, my passion now rust. 
 
I loved you and only you alone,
Damned am I and bereft my throne.  

For you alone my heart doth ache,
Damned am I, how my world doth shake. 

I miss her smile, her lips, and eyes so blue,
Damned am I that her love was not so true. 

I have great pain while she is well,
I know I'm damned, my life is Hell.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Chi Italy]

Ah I see a love issue approaching.....the reason you feel like this, is precisely because you feel and that is the key to being human imo. We have to take the rough with the smooth on our journey, sometimes it is hell on earth and then again sometimes it is pure bliss, an emotion I am wiling take the pain to have again and again....Luck in love to you, Tai

[Silver_Moon]

Love your poetry.. I can feel your hurt through your words... Good writing.. :D
See, Shawn, you are really good. :)

[Virgin 101]

Damned when love isn't reciprocated!

[R J Askew]

Damned am I if I ever feel like that again! NO love is worth it. Damn nature for putting us through such hell ever five years or so. You nailed down the pain damn well.

[Gabrielle E. M. T.]

Congrats in thje "Give Me A Good Poem" contest.
This is a incredible write.
This piece is going in my Library for sure.
Excellent flow of words.
Great rythme.
Good ryhme.
Nice structure.
Wonderfully Written.
Great Job!
^_^

[Last Lying Look]

Great poem! Loved the rhymes and the hurting emotion that was put into this.
How greatly written yet sad. Hope the best for you my friend!

[Hudson]

Very clever using love as a sin to both God and yourself. Very excellent writing. I love the flow and the style

[alternative_be]

I like the way you use the title as a reoccuring feature throughout this poem. Damned to sin, because right now, your life is feeling like you are in Hell ...
You make good use of the repetition, because it is used in an other sentence every time, bringing in nuance, building up towards the end.
Love poetry often is clich� and eternal. Eternal is good. Clich� is not.
This is not a clich�! This is a good straight forward poem, that everyone that ever has had love issues can relate to.
Writing is a good way to vent love issues. I like the way you do it and hope that you will find the love of your life!

[Wicahpi]

Beautifully sad...

"We loved this way every day,
Damned am I, loves most feeble prey!"

Peace n Light

[Catastrophe]

That was just beautifully written, the flow of the poem was so smooth
yet the poem itself is just so sad...i loved reading this piece...
great write!!

[strange_gurl]

oh that's very touching..it's very beautiful