Damned to sin

Damned to sin was my idea, however I would like to think Dr. Rick Puetter, for helping me with the story line and choice of words. ~S. D. Blankenship

I wrote this for you the one I knew,

but now I'm Damned from you too.

And now true love is lost with pain,
Damned am I and she is my bane.

You left me for someone that's new,
Damned am I, my dreams I eschew.

We loved this way every day,
Damned am I, loves most feeble prey! 

You laughed as you ripped out my heart,
Damned am I now that we're apart.

You are impaired most fleshly lust,
Damned am I, my passion now rust. 
 
I loved you and only you alone,
Damned am I and bereft my throne.  

For you alone my heart doth ache,
Damned am I, how my world doth shake. 

I miss her smile, her lips, and eyes so blue,
Damned am I that her love was not so true. 

I have great pain while she is well,
I know I'm damned, my life is Hell.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Chi Italy]

Ah I see a love issue approaching.....the reason you feel like this, is precisely because you feel and that is the key to being human imo. We have to take the rough with the smooth on our journey, sometimes it is hell on earth and then again sometimes it is pure bliss, an emotion I am wiling take the pain to have again and again....Luck in love to you, Tai

[Krazy On The Outside]

I love this poem!
It's amazing!
Great job! =)

[Zane Mathias]

very well written! your emotions ran as free as a river; your words seemed just and full of conviction yet sarrow! keep up the good work!

[Lexi Nicole]

Very emotional, very powerfully. I can almost hear the voice of the speaker screaming about being damned. There's so much in this piece, it's wonderfully written. I love the structure, you're use of couplets. Great work!

-Howl

[brainelation]

this is a horribly realistic depiction of pain. the repetition makes a really strong impression on the reader, and the vocabulary used creates an interesting poetic atmosphere.
the only couplet i didn't really get was the very last one. it seemed like you were saying that it pained you to see her happy. i can relate to that, but i think you can say it in a better way then rhyming well and hell. other then that i thought it was a great poem, though seemingly from tragic inspiration.
keep writing
-josh

[We are young.]

facsinating I have been reading poems for the past two hours, and yours still amazes me to an exstreme.

[nightmask]

fantastic rhyme scheme I love it it's so freakin' good :D

[Flame DM]

the repetition of Damned am I really goes with this piece and i do say this is extremely well penned. (how this writing is compared to my nursery rhymes i will never know because this is far better o.O ) very dark and i could feel the heart break. i hope you feel better from this emotion

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