Damned to sin

Damned to sin was my idea, however I would like to think Dr. Rick Puetter, for helping me with the story line and choice of words. ~S. D. Blankenship

I wrote this for you the one I knew,

but now I'm Damned from you too.

And now true love is lost with pain,
Damned am I and she is my bane.

You left me for someone that's new,
Damned am I, my dreams I eschew.

We loved this way every day,
Damned am I, loves most feeble prey! 

You laughed as you ripped out my heart,
Damned am I now that we're apart.

You are impaired most fleshly lust,
Damned am I, my passion now rust. 
 
I loved you and only you alone,
Damned am I and bereft my throne.  

For you alone my heart doth ache,
Damned am I, how my world doth shake. 

I miss her smile, her lips, and eyes so blue,
Damned am I that her love was not so true. 

I have great pain while she is well,
I know I'm damned, my life is Hell.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Chi Italy]

Ah I see a love issue approaching.....the reason you feel like this, is precisely because you feel and that is the key to being human imo. We have to take the rough with the smooth on our journey, sometimes it is hell on earth and then again sometimes it is pure bliss, an emotion I am wiling take the pain to have again and again....Luck in love to you, Tai

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Sadly brilliant . . .

Heartfelt, raw, edgy, and full of raging honesty.

[Berserker[Diktator Von ..]

I just saw your read request....I really like this one.. It is one of your better ones. Not that yoour others aren't good this is just one of your top ones...great job!

[babygirl hernandez]

You did a good job. heartbreak hurts alot

[Pj]

What a great write!

Loved the lines:
"I miss her smile, her lips, and eyes so blue,
Damned am I that her love's not true."

It was awesome because you described all the beauty, which made the following line hurt even more- very powerful indeed :D

[Simplicity]

It's a beautiful, yet dark poem. It's great. Keep up the good work. My favorite part was: I have great pain while she is well..I known I'm damned, my life is Hell. Great piece!

[K C Scott]

Damn! (haha)
This is a very powerful write. There's othing better than a desperate love story. It's an emotion everyone can relate to. Comparing a lost love to hell is very clever. You cannot have an emotion so low without first having it be high, and without even mentioning it you are implying that there was a heaven before this hell.
I really enjoyed this story. Great opening line, as well as the ending.
:)

[Kitty]

Ah. This is sad.... Love is a strange b***h...

Great write!!!!!!

Josie

[The Dark Priest]

I enjoyed this very much. The comparisons of hell to love are an almsot exact once you take the time to think about it. Well written my friend.

[Evil_Angel]

Loved this, it was very different but sad. The first line made me want to read all the way to the end...which can be really rare for me lol since i'm impatient as hell. Anyway great job, if you want her back I'm sure you can get her tho. Us girls are suckers lol :P