Like A Rose

A bloody egg yolk. A burnt hole spreading in a sheet. An enraged rose threatening to bloom. ~May Swenson.

 The passion there in your heart,

has forlornly torn us equally apart.

The caress of your body has come to pass,

like a child still in school during class.

Your kissing lips bring a cheerless embark,

like animals on a bronze in a park.

Your tender clear skin starts to blight,

just as the moon comes up by night.

Winter's here and you are not,

but Honey dear I haven't forgot.

Now until then I say farewell,

and tonight we will leave this Hell.

Like A Rose, in any season, I see you smile, of red,

eyes so true. I love you,

Now with this all said I will listen for you my dear,

I shall die with out you now so please take care.

Like A Rose.

Author's Note

please tell me what you think.

Reviews

[dark and twisty]

okay this is going to sound really strange - i really like this poem but the one thing i cannot stand or get is the repetition of 'like a rose' in between.

personally i feel it should just be left as a title rather than something that interrupts the intriguing imagery painted by the words of the rest of your poem

[The Autumn Faerie]

You say your writing isn't very good, but you are sadly mistaken.
Really, all you need is a good editor, my dear.
Your poetry is from the heart; it needs nothing further!

I quite enjoyed this piece!
Raye

[Brittany DeFranco]

this is such a pretty poem and it tells the readers how much u love that one person with ur heart
~brittany

[Tabitha Dings]

Also, I wanted to add that you seem to have a very artistic mind. Very creative and worthy of attention.

[Tabitha Dings]

It's nice and pretty sounding. But I believe there are some grammatical issues it seems. Read it over and see if you can spot them.

[closed]

This was very beautiful but I had to read it twice to uderstand it. Besides that it was very good

[Debbie_Philly]

What an amazingly beautiful and touching poem.... very well written... I like it very much !!!

[Dani California]

This is wonderful! I really enjoyed not only its content, but the flow as well....
Last line was great!

Very well done! :)

[Kaela Craven]

"The love found in your heart,

has sadly tore us both apart."

The correct grammar is "torn"