Like A Rose

A bloody egg yolk. A burnt hole spreading in a sheet. An enraged rose threatening to bloom. ~May Swenson.

 The passion there in your heart,

has forlornly torn us equally apart.

The caress of your body has come to pass,

like a child still in school during class.

Your kissing lips bring a cheerless embark,

like animals on a bronze in a park.

Your tender clear skin starts to blight,

just as the moon comes up by night.

Winter's here and you are not,

but Honey dear I haven't forgot.

Now until then I say farewell,

and tonight we will leave this Hell.

Like A Rose, in any season, I see you smile, of red,

eyes so true. I love you,

Now with this all said I will listen for you my dear,

I shall die with out you now so please take care.

Like A Rose.

Author's Note

please tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Love is forever]

Yes life is like a rose pretty in red but get to close and it'll but you with its thorns very nice write I enjoyed it.

[icy-twilight]

Some of the 'like a rose' is unnecessary but yeah, it's a nice poem, and it rhymes too!

[Senzieser]

Wowwwww you are you wonderful writer! Good Job XD


Sen

[T]

I like this, I agree about repeating "like a rose" but still the poem has a warmth that makes the reader feel it.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A beautifully written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Juan]

I wish I had an original response for this but I must agree with the review below mine. But as they replied Good Job! and keep it up.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

lol Sounds like a song... awesome! I'm a sucker for roses so I had to check this out. It's really not that bad. I like it. :) Very beautiful, yet how the love results, *sigh* dreamy. ^^ Thanks for posting this!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[*Petitti*]

i think this is a really good poem i love it

[AutumnRose]

Hello,
Thank you!
as far as I can tell you have such a way with words.
this poem is quite lovely!

[Kitty]

This poem has such a pure beauty to it!!!!

Nicely done!!!

Josie