Kortni

A sad love song... :(

Hello Kortni, don't you think time sure has been good to you?

Me, I woke one morning said I couldn’t, said I am though.

You're looking so damn good, it's nice to know you could.

I still feel you in my heart, I love you in my mind, every part.

What's it been 5 long years? Girl, I've cried so many tears.

Thinking back on all the wasted times you never gave,

A simple love to what put me in my living grave.

Chor.

Wow, can it be, has it been, damn you're braking my heart again.

I've tried so hard but I just can't move on. Yes you win, and I sin.

I can't believe your son's so old. I myself have none to hold.

It burdens my mind, and fills my tearing eyes, just for you.

Girl I still can't think of us as though. I still love you!

My heart has preyed, for you to return each day.

Damned am I loves most feeble pray.

Hey there, Kortni, Can I ask?

Do you miss me even as?

I just don't want to move on, I'm so tired of holding on,

For you I've missed and you I've loved, my hearts braking I know.

Just let me know...

maybe love will find me, but you've already set me free.

Girl, what'd do? I still love you. My heart pines over you!

Chor.

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Unrequited love is one of the slowest deaths that I know of, taking into account the torment of speculation and watching as the one you love moves onwards with their life, constructing beauty while you still wait around in their shadow, wishing they'd only turn away from the light . . . You invoke the feeling of speculation well, I enjoyed this.

[Yheela]

What a great song!
I'd love to hear the music that goes with it.

[Luke Rawlings]

I love this song, it stimulates that feeling of loss and makes you pine for the one you miss. I enjoyed reading this piece.

[Mockingbird]

it's the most difficult thing to do is to move on from a relationship and the person you love so deeply. i understand the pain that comes with letting go. it's good you can articulate these feelings through poetry. excellent job.

[Solitary Traveler]

I did enjoy this piece, and was surprised by the depth of emotions displayed, as well as how much it seems that you don't want to hold on, but still do. Well written, with a few misspelled words, but I got the gist of it.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is a very sad piece a tribute to a lost love .We all go through this sometimes but people move on and times nd feelings change:)

[Sami Khalil]

"Girl I still can't think of us as though. I still love you!

My heart has preyed, for you to return each day.




Damned am I loves most feeble pray."

I have felt the words of pain and agony in this wonderful write....Even feeble prayers can be answered...Bravo

[alternative_be]

I love this kind of sad song. It allows me to picture your feelings. The rhyme works, no grammar or spelling issues I can think of. Maybe you should write some music to go with it?

[Lucifer Jones]

Right on... I'd be curious to hear the song. It plays well in the mind. Really enjoyed it! Thank you for sharing.

[Bluefire]

This s very sad and also sweet. I hope that girl comes back you and treats you right. It's the same way for me and my ex, I still love him but he don't give two kicks about me xD Ohwell. I hope all wors out for you!
A few miner errors but all in all this song was great. I could hear it in my head as I read it.
Well done! ^^