My Angel

My Angel

 

I woke up this morning

To the sun in my face

All I felt was warmth

And A

Feeling of bliss

So I leaned forward

And I

Kissed your lips

 

The sky erupted!

In an ocean of fire

The moon collided with sun

And the explosion

Was nothing compared to the strength of my desire

 

Our lips parted

And the world stood as if frozen

Eager to see by which angel I had been chosen

 

The heavens parted

And angels fluttered down

They bowed before you

As if you wore a crown

They say within you

The beautiful of a thousand angels lies

They gave you two halos

Hidden in your eyes

The queen of angels

Whose words are the most beautiful charms

Your throne is waiting

Right here

In my arms.

 

B.C

Reviews

[Samantha Lynn]

I wish I knew what it is like to feel this way about someone special. People always leave me before we get to close and I just don't know why. Anyway there was one thing that bothered me:

Line four, stanza one: "And A"

lower case the "A". It bothers me. lol
Other than That I loved it. :)
Keep writing! I love reading your works.

[Loner]

How sweet !
a true romantic write about love and just love ...

[Aehr]

I simply loved this poem. The descriptions took me to another world! :D Great job. But I just spotted one error. In the sixth line of the last stanza, did you intend it to be 'The beautiful of a thousand angels lies'? Try changing it to 'The beauty of a thousand angels lie'. Maybe it'll sound better?
Over all, an outstanding piece, one of its kind :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem of love. The good description took the reader to a good place. A very good ending to a outstanding poem of love.
Coyote

[Dark Tower]

Thank you friend. I fear my poetry has last some of the vigor it had last year.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poetry can change with where we are in life. I write what I feel and need to write. A poem of love is always a good poem.

[Sakshi]

Very well written, words structured nicely, emotions expressed precisely.. overall good one.

[Dark Tower]

Most grateful for the kind words my Sakshi

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Wow, this is a magnificent piece,B.C.

"The sky erupted!
In an ocean of fire
The moon collided with sun
And the explosion
Was nothing compared to the strength of my desire" Great job, dear friend.

[Dark Tower]

Thank you Cord. Was trying a different rhyme scheme on this one. Almost thought it had failed me
read moreThank you Cord. Was trying a different rhyme scheme on this one. Almost thought it had failed me